Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter
- explain what you are currently doing
- describe your suitability for this area of work
- say when you can attend an interview.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Sir/Madam
Applying for the position of Waiters published in a local news paper.
Hi, my name is Mustafin and currently I am a college student pursuing my degree in Culinary Arts and Food Service Management and I want to work for a part time position as a waiter. I think that it aligns with my studies and will help me in getting better opportunities for future. Furthermore, I think that it will help your restaurant that someone is having a background of hospitality business and pursuing it for future.
For me the best suitable position can be serving meal to people I think I am good in presenting food. I am available for and interview at any time after 2:00 pm, when I am done With my university. You can call or email me at your earliest convenience If you require any further information, I shall be happy to oblige. You may contact me at the address below. Thanks Regards
Mustafin.
[redacted email]
[redacted phone]
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly state your current status as a student, explain your suitability through your culinary studies, and provide your availability for an interview. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention your background in hospitality, you could have elaborated more on specific skills or experiences that make you a strong candidate. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening line is a sentence fragment rather than a complete sentence. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the depth of information could be improved to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the purpose of the letter to your background and finally to interview availability. Paragraphing is present, though the structure is slightly disjointed due to the lack of a clear introduction and conclusion. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'For me', but the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. The transition between the opening statement and the body of the letter is abrupt. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some topic-specific terms such as 'Culinary Arts', 'Food Service Management', and 'hospitality business'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are minor errors in word choice, such as 'best suitable position' (should be 'most suitable') and 'serving meal' (should be 'serving meals'). To improve, you should aim to incorporate a wider variety of professional collocations and avoid basic phrasing. The spelling is generally accurate, with the exception of 'gamil.com'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For instance, 'someone is having a background' is awkward; 'someone who has a background' would be more natural. There are also issues with punctuation and capitalization, such as 'With' being capitalized mid-sentence and the lack of a proper closing salutation. Additionally, the opening line is a fragment. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence completeness will help.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.