Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

To: restaurant manager

Subject : Applying for job

Dear Sir/Madam i am writing this letter to apply for waiter job which was listed in our local newspaper.

i recently completed my i.msc in information technology and currently i am doing specialization in artificial intelligence and machine learning and i want to do this job to manage my expense .

however, I previously worked at my uncle's restaurant in India during my vacations to help them hence i have good idea of restaurant chain and requirements as well as my polite tone and clear speech can really help for this role after all i am comfortable with nightshift too so it can be addition in it. if you are looking for similar qualities and skills which i have then you can contact me and schedule my interview any time after 12:00pm during week days. you can give me update about job on same mail id mention above.

Thank you.

From: Krish Sathvara

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: current activities, suitability for the role, and interview availability. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For example, while you mention your experience at your uncle's restaurant, it is described in a very brief manner. To achieve a higher band, you should expand on the specific skills gained during that experience, such as customer service, handling payments, or managing busy periods. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal application, although the structure is slightly informal due to the lack of proper paragraphing and formal letter conventions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter lacks a clear structure. It is presented as a single block of text rather than using standard paragraphing (introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion). While the ideas follow a logical sequence, the use of cohesive devices is limited and somewhat mechanical. For instance, the transition 'however' is used incorrectly at the start of the second paragraph, as it does not contrast with the previous sentence. Improving the use of linking words and separating your ideas into distinct paragraphs would significantly enhance the flow and readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'do this job' and 'good idea of'. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'restaurant chain' (which implies a large franchise rather than a single establishment) and 'addition in it'. To improve, you should aim to use more specific professional terminology related to the hospitality industry and ensure that your word choices are contextually accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding punctuation and capitalization. You consistently fail to capitalize 'I' and the start of sentences, which is a significant issue in formal writing. There are also errors in sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing articles (e.g., 'apply for waiter job'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of control over basic grammatical conventions and the limited range of complex structures prevent a higher score. Focusing on sentence boundaries and proofreading for basic errors will help improve your accuracy.

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