Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter
- explain what you are currently doing
- describe your suitability for this area of work
- say when you can attend an interview.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
To
The Owner,
TEXAS, USA ,
8/28/2026.
RESPECTED SIR:
Its here to inform you that I own the experience of 10 years working in a street restaurant in the Dallas as I can no more handle my expenses because of the salary was not good enough. so I request you to give me a chance to work at your wonderful restaurant as I am pretty good to handle all the distribution service. I'll be waiting for you cooperation sir.
Yours Sincerely,
XYZ.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have attempted to address the prompt by mentioning your experience and requesting an interview, the content is severely underdeveloped. You did not fully explain your current situation, nor did you provide specific details regarding your suitability beyond a brief mention of experience. Furthermore, you failed to state when you are available for an interview, which was a specific requirement of the task. To improve, you must expand on each bullet point with relevant details and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a clear structure and logical progression. It is presented as a single, short paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together, and the transition between your current situation and your request for the job is abrupt. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing: one for the introduction, one for your experience, one for your suitability, and one for the interview request. Using linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', and 'in addition' would help create a more professional and coherent flow throughout the letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'pretty good to handle' and 'distribution service' are imprecise and do not reflect the professional tone required for a formal job application. There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and some expressions are unnatural or incorrect in this context. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to use more formal, topic-specific vocabulary related to the hospitality industry, such as 'customer service', 'fast-paced environment', or 'professional background'. Expanding your range of adjectives and verbs will help you convey your experience more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'Its here to inform you' is incorrect; it should be 'I am writing to inform you'. The sentence 'I own the experience of 10 years' is unnatural, and 'the salary was not good enough' is grammatically awkward. There are also issues with punctuation and capitalization. The range of sentence structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, you should practice using a mix of complex sentence structures and ensure you proofread for basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, which are currently problematic in your writing.
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