Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Job request for the given offer to the restaurant management

Dear Sir, I am writting to apply for the job vacancy currently available at your restaurant. I strongly believe that I would be a great fit to this role. I am a degree holder but I need this job desperately to support my family. Furthermore, I have three years of working experience in a restaurant as waitresses. I am requesting you to give me a chance to prove my abilities. I had worked in various countries before. Consequently, I know to communicate with people who have different cultures and speak different languages. I am a responsible person and able to perform my task very effeciently. I beieve this role would be a great fit for me. Morever, I will be getting a chance to learn some amazing things at your restaurant as I have heard alot about this place particularly the way your management has been dealing with the staff.

I will be waiting for your answer.

Thanks

Sincerely

Zainab Tahir

[redacted email]

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points in the prompt: current status, suitability, and interview availability. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. While you mention your degree and experience, the explanation of your current situation is vague, and the request for an interview is missing a specific timeframe, which is a key requirement of the task. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, but the structure lacks the professional polish expected in a formal application. To improve, ensure you provide concrete details for each requirement, such as specifying your current occupation or studies and proposing a clear window for an interview.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized, moving from the purpose of the letter to your qualifications and finally to the interview request. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is contained in a single block of text, which makes it difficult to read. Using clear paragraph breaks between the introduction, the body paragraphs (covering your experience and suitability), and the closing would significantly improve the flow and professional appearance of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic phrases such as 'great fit' and 'amazing things'. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Job request for the given offer' (which is not standard phrasing for a subject line) and 'working experience... as waitresses' (should be 'waitress'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more specific professional terminology related to the hospitality industry and avoid repetitive phrasing. Your spelling is generally accurate, though 'effeciently' and 'beieve' contain errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that detract from the quality of the writing. Examples include 'I am writting' (spelling), 'fit to this role' (preposition error; should be 'fit for'), 'I had worked' (tense error; should be 'I have worked'), and 'I know to communicate' (should be 'I know how to communicate'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the lack of proper paragraphing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.

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