Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Good morning , i am Nikhil Kalra from Delhi and I'm a student right now at st Xavier's college Delhi I'm studying finance as a career role path but I'm new here and I'm searching for part time job here so i was reading the newspaper today and i went through your advertisement for waiters and waitresses here and I'm quite interested in the job position and i want to apply to it . currently I'm a student whose studying finance from here its a reputated college in Delhi and I'm leaning French as a new hobby and the main advantage for your restaurant is that I can talk to people very easily I'm also learning new language so this is the advantage for you guys if you hire me and the restaurant is slightly 10 mins walking distance from where i live in Delhi so it'll be a great opportunity if a apply to this job I'll never be late to the work I'm free day after tomorrow I can come for the interview

regards

Nikhil Kalra

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: it explains your current status as a student, describes your suitability by mentioning your communication skills and proximity to the restaurant, and provides a time for an interview. However, the development of these ideas is quite basic. For instance, the explanation of your suitability could be expanded with more professional detail regarding your work ethic or previous experience, rather than just mentioning your hobby of learning French. The tone is also somewhat informal for a job application letter, which affects the overall professional impact of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a formal structure. It is written as a single, long paragraph without clear transitions or logical grouping of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often linked by 'and' or 'so', which makes the flow repetitive and mechanical. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, the body (your suitability), and the conclusion (the interview request). Using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help create a more professional and logical progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic words like 'job', 'work', and 'advantage'. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'reputated' (should be 'reputable') and 'career role path', which sounds unnatural. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You should aim to use more professional collocations related to employment, such as 'vacancy', 'candidate', or 'professional development', to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding punctuation and sentence structure. There is a lack of capital letters for 'I' and proper nouns, and many sentences are run-on sentences that lack proper full stops. For example, 'I'm a student whose studying finance' should be 'who is studying'. The use of complex structures is minimal, and the overall control of grammar is inconsistent. Focusing on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.

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