Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter
- explain what you are currently doing
- describe your suitability for this area of work
- say when you can attend an interview.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Date: 2026/09/09
To the manager of
simara breeze guest house
simara bara
Subject: job application
I am writing this letter after i saw the advertisement in the local newspaper as i saw the requirement in the paper i am the perfect candiate for the waitresses in your hotel since i am the student of management i have the proper knowledge of both handling guest and have the soft spoken skill which is requried in the waiteresses so along with the letter i am attaching my cv with it hope i will find good respond of you.
your faithfully
ABC
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 99 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you mention your current status as a student and your suitability, the development of these ideas is extremely limited. Furthermore, you completely omitted the requirement to state when you can attend an interview. To improve, you must expand on each bullet point with specific details and ensure you address every part of the prompt. The brevity of the response significantly impacts the overall task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks proper paragraphing, which is essential for a formal letter. The text is presented as a single block, making it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; the sentences are connected in a repetitive, run-on fashion, such as the use of 'as i saw' and 'since i am'. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks for the introduction, body, and conclusion, and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to create a logical flow between your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'perfect candiate' and 'soft spoken skill' are somewhat informal or imprecise. There are also spelling errors, such as 'candiate' and 'requried'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more professional and topic-specific terminology related to the hospitality industry, such as 'customer service experience', 'interpersonal skills', or 'professional background'. Expanding your vocabulary will help you convey your suitability for the role more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding sentence structure and punctuation. The entire response is essentially one long, run-on sentence, which lacks proper capitalization (e.g., 'i', 'simara') and punctuation. There are also errors in verb tense and agreement. To improve, focus on writing shorter, complete sentences with correct subject-verb agreement and proper capitalization. You should also practice using a mix of simple and complex sentence structures to demonstrate better control over English grammar. Currently, the frequent errors and lack of sentence boundaries impede the clarity of your message.
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