Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter
- explain what you are currently doing
- describe your suitability for this area of work
- say when you can attend an interview.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Reaspected sir\mam,
My name is nishika kushwha i am currently living at fortune town near the aurthur area where your location are located few days ago i reached out at
your advertisment that you gave on the newspaper an vaccancy for a waitress were avilable this i am working an shopping mall for the part time because of my study schedule but now i want to work in full time job so urge be work at your place. however i am good at making mocktails and specified to attend and serve a qaulity serviece towards the customers so this is quite a good opertunity to being doing work at your place and gaining new exprenice from new peoples
your faithful,
Nishika
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The candidate has attempted to address the prompt by mentioning current employment status, expressing suitability for the role, and alluding to an interview. However, the response is incomplete in meeting all bullet points fully and clearly. Specifically, the instruction to state when you can attend an interview is handled very vaguely without a clear timeframe. Furthermore, the length requirement has not been met, as the text contains only 121 words, falling short of the 150-word minimum specified for this task. Ideas are under-developed and lack the expansion necessary for a higher band. Because of the under-length penalty and the partial coverage of the bullet points, this performance aligns closely with a Band 4.5 or 5.0, reflecting a minimal yet communicative attempt at the letter format.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response suffers severely from a lack of proper punctuation, capitalization, and paragraphing. The entire body of the letter is written as one long, continuous run-on sentence, for instance: '...few days ago i reached out at your advertisment that you gave on the newspaper an vaccancy for a waitress were avilable this i am working an shopping mall...'. There are no clear logical breaks, and transitional devices are virtually absent, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. Although a formal sign-off ('your faithful') is attempted, the overall organizational structure is extremely weak. This level of cohesion and referencing corresponds to a Band 4.0, as information and ideas are not arranged coherently into paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily restricted. The student relies on simple, repetitive words and makes numerous spelling and word choice errors, such as 'Reaspected' instead of 'Respected', 'vaccancy' instead of 'vacancy', 'opertunity' instead of 'opportunity', and 'exprenice' instead of 'experience'. Collocations are unnatural, as seen in 'being doing work at your place'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic intent—that the writer wants a job as a waitress—the frequent lexical errors and lack of less common items constrain the score. This performance fits the Band 4.0 descriptor, where basic vocabulary and frequent spelling errors impede clear communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text essentially consists of a single massive run-on sentence joined by coordinating conjunctions and comma splices rather than proper punctuation and subordinate clauses. There is a total absence of capitalization for proper nouns ('nishika kushwha') and the beginning of sentences. Tense usage is inconsistent and confused, as demonstrated in 'this i am working an shopping mall for the part time because of my study schedule but now i want to work in full time job so urge be work at your place.' Frequent structural errors distort meaning and make the text difficult to read, placing it firmly at Band 4.0 due to frequent errors and lack of sentence boundaries.
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