Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

To

The chai churi

mohali

my name is jaskirt kaur i am 26 years old and i had saw the waiter and waitress need at your restaurent i saw the advertisement in newspaper

i would like to say that i am fully agree to do this job in your restaurent.

i wolud like to tell you that i am very helpful and kind person . i would like to give interview on monday

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover parts of the task, such as mentioning the job advertisement and offering an interview day. However, it fails to fully address all requirements, particularly explaining current activities and describing suitability in sufficient detail. Furthermore, the response is severely under-length, containing only 73 words compared to the required 150-word minimum. This significantly impacts task fulfillment, leading to an under-length penalty. To improve, ensure all bullet points from the prompt are thoroughly expanded with relevant details, and always meet the minimum word count requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text lacks proper paragraphing and a conventional letter format, presenting ideas in a disjointed manner. Cohesive devices are largely absent, making the flow abrupt and choppy. For example, sentences like 'i had saw the waiter and waitress need' and 'i would like to say that i am fully agree' transition poorly into one another without logical connectors. While the basic topic of applying for a job is maintained throughout, the organizational structure falls short of coherent progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'restaurent' instead of restaurant, 'saw' instead of seen, and 'fully agree' instead of fully qualified or suited. There is a lack of less common lexical items appropriate for a formal or semi-formal job application letter. These limitations restrict the score in lexical resource, as the vocabulary is barely adequate to convey the intended message simply.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying solely on simple sentence structures with frequent errors in punctuation and capitalization, such as the lack of capital letters at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns (e.g., 'jaskirt kaur'). There are also tense errors, such as 'i had saw', and inappropriate verb forms, such as 'i wolud like'. Complex sentences are not attempted, and basic grammatical rules are frequently neglected, causing difficulty for the reader.

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