Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Restaurant has placed have a vacnccies for waiters and waitresses in local newspaer write a letter to the restaurant owner to give me a job in the letter

First of all, I done my Fsc from Mps college , I'm job'less I have nothing to do. I'm perfect for this job because; I have many more expirance of this set

I'm heardworker

Will in my opinine;I have to do batter from every one ;This is my stringht .That i have to do much batter from other

Finally I'm able person to do this job and i am very sensary from my job and this is my hubby to work as a waiter in any resturant . In this time. I have nothing to do. But i belive ;That i am the one how can do this job better than every one .And i am so gland for this Thank you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt, including explaining current activities, suitability for the job, and availability for an interview, though some aspects are confused. For instance, the student mentions current activities ('I have nothing to do') and suitability ('I have many more expirance'), but fails to state when they can attend an interview. The tone is inappropriate for a formal job application letter, drifting into conversational and overly casual remarks. Ideas are limited and under-developed due to restricted vocabulary and clarity issues. Based on these limitations, the response aligns closely with the Band 5 descriptors, as it addresses the task only partially and lacks a clear, appropriate format for a job application.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks clear overall progression and logical paragraphing. Sentences are disjointed, and the structure of the letter is informal and unstructured, starting abruptly with copied prompt fragments rather than a standard greeting. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as inappropriate punctuation and the overuse of semicolons and conjunctions in awkward places (e.g., 'because; I have', 'opinine;I have'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow of ideas. Paragraphs are not used appropriately to separate different parts of the message. These features place the response firmly at Band 4.0, as information and ideas are not arranged cohesively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and plagued by severe spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text. Examples include 'vacnccies', 'newspaer', 'job'less', 'expirance', 'heardworker', 'stringht', 'sensary', 'hubby' (intended as hobby), 'belive', and 'gland'. These errors are not just occasional slips; they are pervasive and frequently strain the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. There is no control over less common lexical items, and the limited range is inadequate for effective communication. This meets the criteria for Band 4.0, where basic and repetitive vocabulary combined with frequent errors strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex structures that are heavily flawed and ungrammatical (e.g., 'I done my Fsc', 'I'm able person to do this job', 'how can do this job'). There is a complete lack of control over punctuation, with stray semicolons and missing capitalisation occurring constantly. Grammatical errors are frequent and systematically distort meaning throughout the text. These persistent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns with Band 4.0, characterised by a very limited range of structures and frequent errors that distort meaning.

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