Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter
- explain what you are currently doing
- describe your suitability for this area of work
- say when you can attend an interview.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
First of all i complete our intermediate examination that's result will announced on September 23 . However i can do job on our nearby hotels in our holidays to support our family financially and to invest on our studies. I'm free nowadays so i think to do job on a restaurant because i have some knowledge abot resturants job and I'm free at my home all the time i need to support our expenses ourself and to get more knowledge about different kind of people that's why i apply for a job at restaurant . I'm very honest so you cannot feel any difficulty on your restaurant about me because i can only focus on my work and do not involved in other affairs so I would ready for our job on restaurant.You can select the date of our interview on any day because I'm free but on the next week we go to lahore with our family so i request to you that tell me the date of my interview .
Thanks a lot.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all parts of the prompt, mentioning current activities, suitability for the job, and availability for an interview. However, the tone and format are somewhat inappropriate for a formal job application letter, leaning heavily into informal and conversational phrasing. Additionally, some ideas regarding the motivation for working are repetitive and lack full development. While the student explains that they are awaiting their intermediate examination results and mentions availability for an interview, the overall coverage is partial due to stylistic limitations and lack of clarity in addressing suitability effectively, aligning it with a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text lacks proper paragraphing, as the entire response is written as a single dense block of text, making it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, relying heavily on basic conjunctions like 'and' or 'so' to link clauses together. For instance, phrases such as 'that's why i apply' and 'so that' demonstrate weak and mechanical connections. Pronoun referencing is also confusing at times, such as switching between singular and plural forms like 'our intermediate examination' and 'our family'. Due to the absence of paragraphing and poor overall cohesion, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.5, falling slightly short of a stable Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing words like 'free', 'job', and 'support'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as spelling mistakes ('abot', 'resturants') and inappropriate word choices like 'do job' instead of 'work' or 'take up a job'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic meaning, but frequent inaccuracies and awkward collocations cause some difficulty for the reader. Expressions like 'involved in other affairs' and 'our expenses ourself' further highlight the restricted control over lexical items, supporting a Band 4.5 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of run-on simple and compound sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions like 'and' and 'so'. There is a complete lack of accurate complex sentence forms. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including tense confusion ('i complete', 'result will announced', 'would ready'), subject-verb agreement issues, and incorrect pronoun usage ('our intermediate examination' instead of 'my intermediate examination'). Punctuation is also weak, with missing capitalisation and run-on clauses. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader, placing the grammar performance firmly at Band 4.0.
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