Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Hey this is Zahid. I belong to Lahore Pakistan, I studied Masters in management sciences in 2026 and now i am willing to divert my professional career from banking into restaurant management. I saw a local newspaper, In newspaper your company posts a position for your respective restaurent. i want to apply for a waiter in your company. here is my details:

I am currently work in MCB Bank as relationship manager since 2022. I am available for this job in this area where you offering this job i am hard worker and doing my work properly. I'd work with very professional behaviour with maintaining all the sequence and company's decorum and policy. When you call me for interview for this vacant i'm available anytime if you call me tomorrow i will come for interview which time we mutually decided i am waiting for an interview call your response is very kind for me.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by applying for a waiter position, explaining that you currently work as a relationship manager at MCB Bank, and saying you are available for an interview. However, the application is only partly developed: your suitability is described mainly as being a “hard worker” who behaves professionally, without examples of customer service, teamwork, or relevant skills. The opening, “Hey this is Zahid,” is too informal for a job application, and the reference to moving into “restaurant management” does not clearly match applying for a waiter role. A more formal letter that explains your motivation and gives specific evidence of your suitability would make the response more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a broadly understandable order: it introduces you, states your current job, describes your suitability, and gives interview availability. This gives the reader the main information, but the ideas are crowded into one continuous paragraph and the progression is not consistently clear. For example, “I saw a local newspaper, In newspaper your company posts a position” repeats the same point, while “here is my details” does not clearly introduce a well-organised list or section. The final sentence combines availability, a possible interview time, and a closing thought without clear separation. Use distinct paragraphs for your application, experience and availability, and connect ideas with accurate, purposeful transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to employment, including “relationship manager,” “professional behaviour,” and “interview,” so the reader can identify the context. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “divert my professional career,” “your respective restaurent,” and “maintaining all the sequence.” “Company’s decorum and policy” also sounds unnatural in this context. These choices sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow, particularly when describing your suitability. Aim for precise, conventional application language and check spelling, including “restaurant.” More specific terms related to serving customers and working in a team would also help you describe your strengths.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its basic message, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the sentence structures are mostly simple or joined together without clear boundaries. Errors include “I am currently work” instead of a correctly formed present-tense verb, and “When you call me for interview … I’m available anytime,” where the conditional structure and article use need attention. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “In newspaper” and the long final sentence, which contains several ideas without appropriate sentence breaks. These recurring errors can make the reader pause to interpret the message. Practise accurate present and past forms, articles, and complete sentences, then use a few controlled complex structures to express availability and experience.

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