Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In the letter

• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

TO,HR DEPARTMENT ABC RESTURANT,

18TH BLOCK , XYZ STREET .

FROM, MUHAMMAD MUSA MALK.

SUBJECT : APPLICATION FOR JOB AS WAITER.

Respected hr , I am writting this letter to let you know that i am applying in you resturant as a waiter . I saw your advertisement in a newspaper that was present in the shop of a local barber . In that ad it was written that you are hiring waiters and waiteresses in your resturant .

I am glad to let you know that i was looking for such a particullar job that is related to my previous background.

Currently i am studying becholers in computer sciences from university of messina italy moreover doing a part time job as a waiter in evening in resturant named as hells kitchen .

I can assure you that i am a suitable candidate for this job .i am in this feild from almost 2 years moreover i won the title for Employee of the month 3 times in past few months in addition i can also speak diffrent languages such as italian , english , french and german due to that i can deal diffrentte costumers from diffrent nation easily . These details are just a tip of the iceberg.

For further details you can call me for interview on any day in full week between 2 pm to 4 pm . My details are given below .

I will wait for your positive feedback .

THANKYOU .

Muhammad Musa Malik,

cell no : [redacted phone] ,

EMAIL: [redacted email].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three requested points: you explain that you are studying computer science and working part-time as a waiter, give relevant experience and language skills, and state that you are available for an interview between 2 p.m. and 4 p.m. You also make your purpose clear from the subject line and opening. The strongest support for your suitability is your two years in the field and three employee-of-the-month awards. However, some details are less fully developed: you do not explain what your waiter duties or achievements involved, and “any day in full week” is not a precise interview arrangement. A more direct, professional closing and a clearer account of your experience would make the application more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information follows a generally sensible order: application purpose, current activities, suitability, and interview availability. This makes the letter understandable overall, and the separate sections help identify its main parts. However, the body is presented largely as one continuous block, so the shift from your studies to your work experience and then to your language skills could be easier to follow with distinct paragraphs. Linking expressions such as “moreover” and “in addition” are repeated and sometimes make the sentences feel mechanically joined. The reference “These details” is also vague after several different claims. Use shorter paragraphs, vary the transitions, and make references explicit—for example, “My experience and language skills would help me serve international customers.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for a job application, including “suitable candidate,” “Employee of the month,” “part-time job,” and “interview.” These choices communicate your experience and strengths. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “resturant,” “particular,” “costumers,” and “diffrent,” which reduce the professional impression. Some expressions are also awkward or too informal for an application: “a tip of the iceberg” does not clearly explain your qualifications, while “positive feedback” is less natural than a direct request for a response. Aim for accurate spelling and conventional application language, and choose precise terms such as “customers” and “hospitality experience” rather than relying on broad or idiomatic phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at longer, more complex sentences, such as the sentence connecting your language skills with serving customers from different countries. The main message remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “I am applying in you restaurant” has an incorrect preposition and missing possessive form; “I was looking” would be more appropriate as “I have been looking” in this context; and “I am in this field from almost 2 years” needs a present-perfect construction with “for.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention, particularly where a full stop is followed immediately by “i.” Review articles, verb forms, prepositions, and capitalization, then divide long sentences to improve control.

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