Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 4.5)

in our conturies most of student take a gap year after finishing college they donot take admission in any university most of young student waste their time on travelling tours it effect on their mental health physical health they got trauma they got tauntness from elder but most of young learn communication skill they improve their habbits they work online to earn money when they get back to education most of the universites not give admission according to their age look but most of the universitesgiveadmission but i agree with gap year becaus it give us relax freedom space and we enjoy our life whole year we escape most of the things we learn skill we learn how to communicate how to photography how to heal our past trauma that we surrived in our college so both are are best travelling or studying after college in the gap year i agree with travelling because travelling is best part of our life because travelling plays a very important role in our life after ginishing college we went to islamabad lahore murre to vist historicall place malls concerts and we do our small bussiness at home like foodsale marketing

photograhy content creation after doing these we get alot of money we get buy any thing for our life we spent time with family after colleng finishing so i agree with gap year because it is better our life it heal our stress mental health and we spent more time with family

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall opinion in favour of a gap year, especially when you say it offers “relax freedom space” and helps with stress and mental health. You also include relevant examples, such as travelling to Islamabad and Lahore, spending time with family, and trying small businesses or content creation. However, the response only minimally develops the task: it does not clearly explain how these experiences benefit students specifically when they return to education, and some points—such as trauma and universities admitting students based on age—are unclear or unsupported. The response is also one word below the required minimum. To strengthen your answer, explain two or three benefits in detail and connect each directly to university study, while briefly acknowledging the possible drawbacks you mention.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable overall direction: you introduce gap years, state that you agree, and give examples of travel and activities. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough, and the response is largely one continuous block rather than clearly developed paragraphs. Several points run together—for example, the discussion of universities, relaxation, communication skills, travel, and earning money—so the reader has to work to identify how they relate. Linking words such as “but,” “because,” and “after” are used repeatedly, sometimes without making the relationship between ideas clear. Organise the essay into an introduction, separate body paragraphs for the benefits and examples, and a conclusion. Use clearer transitions and refer back to the central question about returning to education.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “communication skill,” “mental health,” “small business,” and “content creation,” and your examples show an attempt to discuss different gap-year activities. However, the vocabulary is basic and often repetitive, particularly “we learn,” “we get,” and “we spent.” Several spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make parts difficult to understand, such as “tauntness,” “ginishing,” and “historicall place.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “travelling tours” and “we get buy any thing.” Build a more precise range for discussing benefits and drawbacks, and check spelling and collocations. For instance, describe how travel can broaden students’ perspectives or how work can develop practical skills, rather than repeating general claims about learning skills.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate a general position and attempt to connect ideas using clauses with “because,” “when,” and “after.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, and articles often make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “most of student take” needs a plural noun and determiner, while “it effect on their mental health” has an incorrect verb form and sentence pattern. The long run-on sentences also lack punctuation, making it hard to see where one idea ends and another begins. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas accurately. Check subject–verb agreement, past and present tense consistency, articles, and full stops before submitting.

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