Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most of the students take a break after completing their inter they do not prefer universities they think that they they do work or gain expirence from this and then rejoin their classes after a year. In my opinon i think that it was not a good idea to waste a year and leave our study because once we quiet a field of education life after that we never rejoin it again. There are sevral reason. If we start doing a job we can stuck in it however if we leave the job and start our study again after a year so we never give much focus on our classes. Moreover if we want a good future we should not leave our study after school further we should continue our universities and als do a part time job in a night that can give us knowledge and throughg this kind of activity we can also get much expirence and we can gain much expirence about the world. I have a example of my friends after they complete their college they leave their studies and say to me that they rejoin it again after sometime and they start doing a job. Now whenever I saw them they always say to me that we made a huge mistake we should not quiet our studies because now it is not possible that we began our education again. They said now we are stuck in the work our mind has change now and they advice to me that I would continues my study and do a part time job also.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear position against taking a year out, and your examples about friends who left education to work are relevant to the question. You also suggest an alternative—continuing university while doing part-time work—which helps address the benefits of gaining experience. However, the response only partly explores the claim that non-academic life can benefit students when they return. The argument that people may become stuck in a job is repeated, while the effects on learning, maturity, or future study are not explained in much detail. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation and a specific example, and acknowledge why travel or work might benefit some students before explaining why you disagree overall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable line of argument: you state your view, give reasons, and finish with an example from your friends. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “however” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the writing is presented as one long paragraph, so the stages of the argument are difficult to distinguish. Several points are joined together with “and” or repeated rather than developed in a clear sequence, and references such as “this kind of activity” are not always precise. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and example, and make each paragraph focus on one main point. More accurate, varied links between claims and explanations would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to education and work, including “gain experience,” “part-time job,” “future,” and “rejoin.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of your argument. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “study,” “job,” and “experience.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “expirence,” “quiet” where you mean “quit,” and “stuck in the work.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing education and career choices, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, you could describe someone as “committed to a job” or say they “resume their studies.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “if,” “because,” and “however,” and the reader can generally identify your main position. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and many longer sentences contain errors that make them difficult to follow. For example, “If we start doing a job we can stuck in it” is missing a verb form, while “they advice to me that I would continues my study” has problems with agreement and verb forms. There are also errors with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms when revising.

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