Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Alot of our young people decide to take a pause of 1 year between ending school and beginning of university to gain experience in that 1 year has become a part of heated debate in contemporary society.

From my perspective,who wanted to take a gap year for their work preferences or wanted to travel is actually a good thing .These people can make their life in that year and also destroy,however; they may be get a proffestionals in their field .I think they have to choose their field in which they wanted to work because this action help them alot.Moreover, that gap year for work experience offers them the big oppertunity to make their fortune.

I believe that when those get their experience in their work that assist the individual personality.For instance,i have seen so many people who take a work experience in between ending school and starting university aid them in many ways like they have more life experience than other people who joined the university after ending school.They are sensible person and more energetic then others.

I strongly agree that who gain the work experience in any time that really assist them in their choosen fields. As far as I concerned even i take a year out for my work experience and also make a tour with my friends for memories.That step really helps me in my education when i make a start in university.

In my conclusion,those who wanted to take a year out that actually benefits them in their work life experience . I suggest that young people have to take this step so they really feel the things what is happening in this world .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear overall position in favour of a gap year, especially in “I strongly agree,” and you address work experience and travel. The personal example about taking time for work and a tour also makes the response relevant to the question. However, the benefits are mostly asserted rather than explained: claims that young people become “more sensible” and that the experience “helps me in my education” need specific detail showing how these experiences improve university study. The discussion also focuses much more on work than on travel, and the opening is difficult to interpret. Develop two or three distinct benefits, explain the link to returning to education, and support each with a clear example to make the response more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, supporting paragraphs and a conclusion, and the main position is repeated near the end. This gives the reader a basic sense of organisation. However, progression between ideas is not always clear: the second paragraph moves from choosing a field to making a fortune, while the next shifts to personality and comparisons with other students without a clear connection. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “For instance,” and “In my conclusion” are used, but they do not consistently show the precise relationship between points. Some references, including “those” and “this action,” are unclear. Organise each body paragraph around one benefit, then explain and illustrate it, using clear references and more purposeful transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “gap year,” “work experience,” “personality,” and “university,” and you use some phrases to express evaluation, such as “I strongly agree.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, for example “make their life in that year,” “get a proffestionals,” and “make their fortune.” Spelling errors such as “Alot,” “oppertunity,” and “choosen” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases rather than translating ideas word for word: for example, explain that a year out can help students “develop practical skills” or “gain independence.” Check spelling and use a learner’s dictionary to confirm collocations before using less familiar expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the response includes examples and a personal statement. However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “From my perspective, who wanted to take a gap year…” lacks a clear grammatical subject, while “this action help them” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. In “they may be get,” the verb pattern is faulty, and “when i make a start in university” does not fit the intended tense. Capitalisation and comma spacing are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “which” and “when,” checking that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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