Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many young people choose a year out between finishing school and staring university in other to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic in life.

My opeine is about this problem that same students are get experience a year and same people are continue education in university. i am going for that person that get a year for experience or to travel to experience about non-education so we knows about that people because experience can't give by education.

My knowledge about is that our ment are opens and we get more ideas form experience then we came back our education.

ex: we didn't get education than what hasspaness we get knowledge about non-education people what's these people are facing problem about without education.

They are can't read are they people mant are not good about world they dis counant with world because we have clear future with a education.

After one year we more focused on education because

we ware see that what problem are faced without education

ex: we can't travel all our world and the languages counting with people majurat non academic people lives in village's and all family stuck their they are problem are very big number which is facing our non academic people facing.

So i am agree with goes for year get a experience about it.

So we know the world more thinks last but not the list is we have you our education counite as full of life i am arslan ahmed and this my opines about work experience and non academic.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response attempts to address the prompt by expressing an opinion on taking a gap year. However, the ideas are significantly underdeveloped and often unclear. While you state your position, the supporting arguments—such as the claim that non-academic experience helps one understand the problems of those without education—are difficult to follow due to the lack of logical progression and clarity. The response lacks the depth required for an academic task, as the points provided are repetitive and do not fully explore the benefits of a gap year in a coherent manner. To improve, focus on developing one clear idea per paragraph with specific, relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no logical progression of ideas, and the paragraphing is ineffective, with many sentences appearing as isolated thoughts rather than a cohesive argument. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your reasoning. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas, and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates directly to your main argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are many instances of word-choice errors, such as 'ment are opens' (minds are open) and 'dis counant' (disconnected). You rely on basic, repetitive language, and the lack of control over word forms makes it difficult to convey complex ideas. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and practicing the correct spelling and usage of academic vocabulary. Reading English articles and noting how words are used in context will help you expand your range and improve your precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning of your sentences. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence construction. For example, 'They are can't read' and 'we ware see that what problem are faced' are grammatically incorrect and hinder readability. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, such as subject-verb-object, and ensure you are using consistent tenses. Proofreading your work for basic errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms is essential.

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