Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In current fast world everyone want to reach at their goal fast and being succesful

howevre this all thing required and paisions and hardwork perhapse many of individuals drop their school and collegs too to kneeling for their path and experncing diffrent life from the practical world

for example, many stundents had diffrent taste and carrier path like they wantr

to grow as an artist or as desginer or else in bussines marketing so many of

them belives that leaving some years a school and college and ganing expirence from outer wold can be rose thier knowlage and provide them diffrent prespective towards there destiny moreover many young adults were restart their acdemic study after these practises but on the other side many students kept practice thier work.

if i has to speak about thsese kind of expriments i would tottaly agree with procces beacuse in my opinion rather thand just study from theory people

also has to go for the practical work beacuse that enlarge thier knowlge and exprenice both in comprehancive way unlike only work and study from an acedemic platform .

here i also found to share one of my friends exprenice which i know closely he is preaparing for chareted account examination pherhapese just practice from an library he join an tutor acdemy to teach some students and it help him alot beause he not only navigating the student but also he memorize his things towards the teaching so yes i am completely agree that if a person is willing to exprince somthing it helps and enlarge thier life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt regarding the benefits of taking a gap year, expressing a clear position of agreement. The response touches on personal development and gaining practical experience rather than purely theoretical learning. However, the ideas remain underdeveloped and lack specific, well-supported arguments. While an example involving a friend is introduced, it is somewhat confused and difficult to follow. The response covers the main topic, but the limited depth of thought and lack of clear extension place it at a Band 5 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe structural and organizational issues. There is virtually no proper paragraphing, as the entire response is presented in one or two dense blocks of text with run-on sentences. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with transitions like 'howevre', 'perhapse', and 'moreover' appearing awkwardly or acting as punctuation rather than true connectors. The logical progression is hindered by poor punctuation, making it difficult to follow the flow of ideas. Consequently, the organization reflects a Band 4 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical resource is very basic and heavily impacted by persistent spelling and word-choice errors. Throughout the text, common words are misspelled, such as 'succesful', 'howevre', 'paision', 'collegs', 'bussines', 'knowlage', 'prespective', and 'exprince'. While the student attempts to use some less common phrases like 'practical world' and 'comprehensive way', the high frequency of lexical errors ('rose thier knowlage', 'restart their acdemic study') severely restricts precision and occasionally impedes communication, aligning closely with Band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text consists largely of long, rambling sentences joined by incorrect conjunctions or missing punctuation. There is a near-total absence of correct punctuation, leading to massive run-on sentences such as 'for example, many stundents had diffrent taste...'. Frequent errors occur in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement ('many young adults were restart', 'people also has to go'), and clause structures. These persistent errors frequently distort meaning and impede the reader's understanding, consistent with a Band 4 score.

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