Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Many young student's pick to take a year out between complet their study and srarting Universities in order to take some work exprince or to explor the some country .The experience of non acadamic life this benefits the person when they comeback to education
First;In my oppine; I agree beacuse when individual complet there study and free from School or College wrok .They should to go out side and see all over the world and people and there tridintion.They will see how was people from other Nation .And there new invention.
Person have to abilty to go out side the home. And some individual have like a burger boies;Which can't go out for home . I my opinine I prepar to go to go out side away from home . If any one who come out from home and to go out side or another country . They will know every thing about thr other counrty religons and there people and there tridition and there hospitlity. When they come back to home. They can tottaly change there word's and there expression
In my family my brother go to foran.When they come back home.He is tottaly change his behaver his Skin cloure .And we are tottaly shock that,How it possbile
Finally many young person chosse too take a holyday's away from there country to take work experience or to move .The experince of non acadamic life this offer benefits.When they return to study .This is my oppinine about this topic .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing an opinion on taking a gap year, noting that it provides valuable non-academic experiences, travel, and work opportunities. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, relying heavily on personal anecdotes rather than fully extended arguments. The position is stated, but the support lacks depth and structure. The response meets the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, allowing for a score at Band 4.5 based on the limited and partially developed treatment of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall logical organisation and progression are weak. Sentences are often disjointed, and cohesive devices are either missing or used inaccurately, as seen in expressions like 'First;In my oppine' and 'Finally many young person'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical flow hinders the reader's ability to easily follow the progression of ideas. These features align with the descriptors for Band 4.0, where information is not arranged coherently enough to ensure smooth progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and heavily repetitive, featuring numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'complet' for completing, 'srarting' for starting, 'exprince' for experience, and 'tridintion' for tradition. The range of vocabulary is limited, and these errors frequently strain the reader and impede clear communication throughout the text. This performance corresponds to Band 4.0, characterised by basic, repetitive vocabulary and frequent errors that strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex sentences that are almost always faulty. There are persistent errors in basic punctuation, capitalization, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage, such as 'Many young student's pick' and 'In my family my brother go to foran.' These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and distort meaning at times, placing the grammar clearly at Band 4.0.
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