Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people like to choose some time or a year after their school and to starts their university to gain their work knowledge or experience while the experience of non academic life got opportunity some benefits. From my everyday experience and observation I am competely agree with this statement that young people should a year between at the end of their school and starting the university life. with several reason I will explain some reason that why I'm agree with this statement.
First of all, it is one of great opportunity for student to earn some pocket money for their daily expense or for their studies while it helps them to mantain disciplion. some young people who belong to a meddle class famliy can earn and save money for their personal habites.
Second of all, it also gain work experience to young people to work in their future life while it help them to work with constrate. Additionally it enhence their knowledgw as well as their work abality.
Furthermore, in this way they have also opportunity to work in their related field for instance I'm the student of computer science after my school it is benefical for me to work in the field that I'm following as my studies. Additionally it enhence my knowledge to improve my skills to work hard.
Unfortunatily I'm from pakistan I did not got any work opportunity related to my studies even unfortunatily I never work in my entire life.so that I do not have any work experience but personally I believe that every young people should work during their studies or between a year finishing school and starting university.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by taking a clear, definite position agreeing with the prompt that taking a gap year benefits students returning to education. The main body paragraphs introduce several relevant ideas, such as earning pocket money, gaining work experience, and exploring a chosen field of study. However, the development of these ideas remains somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the mention of computer science and personal context at the end drifts into anecdotal writing rather than fully extending the broader arguments. Overall, the ideas are relevant and support the overall thesis, fitting a Band 5.5 to 6.0 profile, but would benefit from further elaboration and deeper explanation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays a basic structure with clear signposting phrases like 'First of all', 'Second of all', and 'Furthermore', attempting to organise the content logically. However, paragraphing is somewhat problematic; the introduction and personal conclusion lack smooth transitions, and the final paragraph feels isolated. Furthermore, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or overused, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'the experience of non academic life got opportunity some benefits'. While there is a discernible overall progression from introduction to body arguments to conclusion, the faulty cohesion and repetitive linkers place this performance firmly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations. Examples include 'work knowledge', 'non academic life got opportunity some benefits', 'meddle class famliy', and 'enhence their knowledgw'. The writer attempts some less common terms like 'competely', 'disciplion', and 'benefical', but spelling errors are recurrent ('competely', 'mantain', 'disciplion', 'meddle', 'famliy', 'habites', 'enhence', 'knowledgw', 'abality', 'Unfortunatily'). These lexical inadequacies and spelling mistakes occasionally strain the reader, aligning the vocabulary performance with Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies on a mix of simple and somewhat complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and syntax is weak throughout. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues and incorrect tense usage, as seen in 'to starts their university', 'I am competely agree', 'young people should a year between', and 'I did not got any work opportunity'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing periods, particularly near the end of the text. Because errors occur consistently and sometimes impede clarity, the grammatical performance reflects a Band 5.0.
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