Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In the last few years, people are so much hard working becuase this era is so much difficult for students becuase the students have no any free time and people are comapring a single student with different students .They are properly involved in studies and free from the world. I agreed these diificulties and ask those people who have no any free time . If you have any free time you can going to the nothern areas of your country or you can travel to another country for a tourism purpose.
In addition, After the studies if I have any free time and no any home work. I want to visit foreign countries and going to the nothern parts of our country . Because our mind is totally cut off from studies and our mind can't go to the backward where i can resume my studies. I am totally agree from this statement 'If you are not travel to any place You became a dull ''
For Instance, I am taking my own example not any other person if i can take another person example the statement is totally wrong beacuse i can't judge another person beacuse i am not know another person personally . Last year in the November I am going to the nothern part of our country .The sceen is very fascinating. I am really so much obsessed in the beauty of the beautiful mountains and the beautiful sceneries.
In conclusion, I am share a truely experience which i can take from my own life. If you have any free time you make a plan and go for a travel . But you can completely focus in your studies then you will make a plan for travelling.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the topic of taking a gap year and traveling, though the argumentation is heavily reliant on personal anecdote rather than broader societal analysis. The student clearly states a position ('I agreed these diificulties' and 'I am totally agree from this statement'), but the ideas are not fully developed in line with academic standards. While the prompt asks about the benefits of non-academic life and work experience or travel on returning to education, the student focuses almost exclusively on the mental relief of travel rather than how it specifically aids academic pursuits. This places the response in the Band 5 to Band 6 range, as it addresses the general theme of travel but leaves several aspects under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, attempting an overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by abrupt transitions and a lack of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'In addition' and 'For Instance' are used, but the internal links between sentences are often mechanical or missing entirely. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as shifting pronouns without a clear antecedent. Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed, which hinders the overall readability of the text. These features align closely with the Band 5 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words such as 'studies', 'free time', 'beautiful', and 'travel'. There are numerous spelling and word choice errors, including 'becuase', 'comapring', 'diificulties', 'nothernal', and 'truely'. The student attempts some less common phrases, but these are often used inaccurately, such as 'our mind can't go to the backward where i can resume my studies' and 'obsessed in the beauty'. These lexical limitations and frequent inaccuracies cause noticeable strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.5 or Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and basic coordinating conjunctions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to severe grammatical breakdowns and run-on structures, such as 'In the last few years, people are so much hard working becuase this era is so much difficult for students becuase the students have no any free time...'. Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions are pervasive throughout the text. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a higher band level.
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