Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many of undeveloped Countries many of of young people choose to take a year gap between finishing their scooland starting their Universities.Most of the people do this because they wants to gain experience . But on the other hand most of the student belongs to the poor families. They can not afford their futher study expense.Some of people just do for it to fun . They wants to change their life style and mode of life. Some people move from one place to another place . Bt in developve countries this is not appreciable.

when you start your study after a year gap, you lost your most of concepts, ideas and basics education. you can not pay proper attention to your study. you take time to make it habitual. you can not creat time slot. you face difficulty to memorise the contact.So it is not good r feesible to choose the gap.

I am not agree to choose a year between finishing school and starting your univerties. Due to a gap you can not chase your future plan easily. Because lost of concepts and ideas lost in your mind. Continously study make easy to acheive your goals.

For examples

My father was a bussines man,they start a bussines with their study.With the passage of time their bussines grow up high and high. They had no enough time to focused on study. day by day he skip their lectures and just gave time to their bussines and only fullfilled their bussines need and responsibilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only minimally, as the discussion of whether a gap year is beneficial is limited and overly generalized. You state your position that you disagree with taking a gap year, arguing that it causes students to lose fundamental concepts and ideas. However, the supporting ideas are minimal and lack sufficient development. For instance, the example provided about your father starting a business is tangential and not clearly connected to the prompt regarding the academic benefits or drawbacks of taking a gap year before university. To move to a higher level, you need to present a clearer, more fully developed argument with relevant examples that directly support your position on the given topic.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout the text, leading to a lack of clear progression. While you attempt to divide your thoughts into paragraphs, the overall logical organization is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inaccurately, making transitions between sentences and ideas abrupt and sometimes confusing. For example, sentences like 'Bt in developve countries this is not appreciable' appear disjointed from the surrounding context. Referencing is also unclear at times, particularly in the final paragraph where the personal example is introduced without a smooth link to the main argument. To improve, you should ensure that ideas follow a logical sequence and that appropriate cohesive devices are used to connect sentences and paragraphs clearly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, employing a limited range of words to express your ideas. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally strain the reader, such as 'scooland', 'futher', 'feesible', and 'developve'. You also rely on simple terms repeatedly rather than attempting less common lexical items. To improve your lexical score, you need to expand your vocabulary range and pay closer attention to correct spelling and word formation. Using more precise and varied vocabulary related to education and lifestyle choices will help convey your ideas with greater clarity and style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures with frequent errors. There are numerous mistakes in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'most of the student belongs', incorrect pronoun usage such as 'I am not agree', and missing or incorrect articles. Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic throughout the response. When you attempt more complex structures, they frequently contain errors that can cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, you need to demonstrate a greater variety of sentence structures while significantly improving your control over basic grammatical rules, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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