Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, gain work experience or to travel between finishing school and starting university have become and integrel part of the rising debates in the present world. While proponents of the arguments are in favour, the opponents, howover, are completely against to the relevence of the work experience or to travel between ending school and begining university. I agree to this statement about to travel and also work experience because it helps us to gain more knowledge about different places and different books.

To commence with, there are a number of arguments in favour of my belief. The most prominents one is that the advantage to travel in different areas and feel fresh after busy routine. In addition, travel also give more information about that places and tell the interesting history about different places. For example, everyone have a busy routine now and face various challenges in their life, so people feel fresh air and natural places and stay relax after a hectic routine.

Moreover, if people do work in schools, offices and banks they also get useful information and get experience in their field. For example, anyone get job in school and gain knowledge about different topics and feel comfortable to convey their education to other people. Work in school not only do job it is a huge oppotunity to get a new and amazing experience and enjoy their job with different children whose belongs to different culture and different religions. Additionally, it is a way to get information about different tradditions.

In conclusion, both have own advantages because both are convey different types of knowledge to different people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, earning this band because the position, while stated, is not always clear or consistently maintained throughout the essay. The introduction attempts to address the prompt by stating, 'I agree to this statement about to travel and also work experience,' but the ideas presented in the body paragraphs remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the arguments regarding travel focus narrowly on feeling fresh and learning history, while the discussion on work experience outlines basic job roles without fully exploring how these non-academic pursuits specifically benefit an individual upon returning to education. To reach a higher level, you should ensure that all parts of the prompt are explored in depth, with fully extended supporting ideas that directly connect gap year experiences to future academic success.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay displays some organization with basic paragraphing and clear introductory signposts like 'To commence with' and 'In conclusion,' placing it at this level. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and cohesive devices are frequently repetitive or inaccurate. For example, transition phrases such as 'In addition,' 'Moreover,' and 'Additionally' are overused without smoothly linking the underlying logic between sentences. Furthermore, referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'tell the interesting history about that places,' where pronoun and demonstrative reference fails to maintain clear links. To improve, you need to use a wider variety of cohesive devices naturally and ensure that your sentences flow logically from one point to the next to build a more cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your lexical resource is limited but minimally adequate to convey a basic message, resulting in this band placement. You attempt to use less common vocabulary, but noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling cause some difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'integrel' instead of integral, 'howover,' 'relevence,' 'prominents,' and 'tradditions.' Additionally, collocation and phrasing are often awkward, such as 'gain work experience or to travel have become and integrel part' and 'everyone have a busy routine.' To move up to a higher band, you must expand your vocabulary range and focus heavily on accurate word forms, spelling, and natural collocations so that your writing communicates ideas smoothly without distracting errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical structure of this essay relies on a very limited range of sentence patterns, with frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty and contain issues with subject-verb agreement, verb forms, and prepositions. For instance, you write 'everyone have a busy routine' instead of 'everyone has,' and 'anyone get job in school' instead of 'getting a job in a school.' There are also noticeable errors in article usage and tense consistency throughout the text. To progress, you need to demonstrate a greater variety of complex grammatical structures and improve your control over basic syntax, word forms within grammatical patterns, and punctuation to ensure error-free sentences.

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