Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I am totally agree that experience of non-academic life offers benefits the individual when they return to education as it enable a person to cope up with life hurdles. For example took a break after finishing school to travel for my mental peace. I decided to visit hilly areas when i started my journey i felt its very amazing not doubt it was very amazing but beside it i face many hurdles. In school time i always relay on my parents but when I go by myself alone i had to do all my work alone face all challenges alone when i came back went universityh freely environment

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you agree that non-academic experience can help students cope with life’s challenges. The travel example is relevant, particularly your contrast between relying on your parents at school and managing tasks alone. However, the response develops only one brief example and does not explain clearly how these skills benefit you specifically when you return to university. The final phrase about returning to a “freely environment” is incomplete, so the outcome is difficult to understand. The response is also 99 words, below the required 250 words; this leaves the task substantially underdeveloped. Add a second reason or example and explain the link between independence, travel or work experience, and later study.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic line of progression: you state your agreement, describe a trip, and contrast your dependence at school with handling challenges alone. This gives the reader a general sense of your example. However, the response is one continuous block, and the sequence becomes difficult to follow in the long sentence beginning “when i started my journey.” Several ideas are joined without clear punctuation or transitions, while “but beside it” and “when i came back” do not establish the relationships clearly. Use separate paragraphs for your position and supporting points, and divide the travel account into shorter sentences. Clear links such as “As a result” could show how the experience prepared you for university.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You communicate the central ideas using basic vocabulary such as “travel,” “challenges,” and “parents,” and “hurdles” is a relevant attempt to express difficulties. However, the range is narrow and some choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts of the account unclear. For example, “cope up with life hurdles” is not a natural collocation, and “freely environment” does not convey a clear meaning. “Very amazing” is also repetitive and imprecise. Aim for more precise phrases connected to the topic, such as “become more independent,” “manage practical responsibilities,” and “adjust to university life.” Check spelling and word forms, including “rely,” “faced,” and “university,” so the reader can follow your meaning easily.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas with clauses using “as,” “when,” and “but,” and the contrast between school and travelling alone gives you an opportunity to use more varied sentence forms. At present, however, sentence boundaries and verb forms are often inaccurate. The opening should be “I totally agree,” and “as it enable” needs subject–verb agreement (“as it enables”). In the travel account, “For example took a break” lacks a clear subject, and the shift between “I decided,” “i started,” “i face,” and “when i came back” makes the timeline hard to follow. The final clause is incomplete. Practise writing complete sentences with consistent past tense, accurate punctuation, and clear subjects before attempting longer structures.

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