Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

Student answer (Band 4.5)

yes, I am agree with that because the people when going for travel they can learn a lot by it .like as they visited the historical placese which give them the knowlege about history and and different culture. the students take things as practical infomation and these things can not easily forget . the students can remember them as memories.that is the big reason that experiense of non-academic life of students offers the benefits the individual when they return to the education.there are many examples in daily life .One of my friend going on a tour with his faimely .they can visit the hills in murree in summar vocation . but there is more cold weather as compare to thier village. they can visitet almost half of murree and learn a lot by it about wheater , climate , cultuer and different people.they can interact with different kind of people for different purpose which increase his communication skill which is most importent in study.I think the traveling is the best resour for collecting information . i am visit many places in in summar vocation . i can learn different of culture. I can visit the hills in murree in summar vocation . but there is more cold weather as compare to thier village. I can visitet almost half of murree and learn a lot by it about wheater , climate , cultuer and different people.I can interact with different kind of companies and I get information about thier product ant leadership .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a clear position in favour of the statement, and the response gives relevant reasons: travel can teach students about history and culture, and interacting with different people may improve communication skills. The Murree trip is a concrete example that helps illustrate these points. However, the discussion focuses almost entirely on travel and does not address the other option in the prompt—gaining work experience—or explain in much detail how these experiences help students when they return to university. Several ideas are repeated, particularly the Murree example, rather than extended with further explanation. To strengthen the response, develop a smaller number of distinct reasons and show specifically how each supports academic study.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable line of thought: you state agreement, give reasons related to travel, and add personal examples. Some linking expressions, such as “because,” “but,” and “which,” help connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long block, so the reader cannot easily distinguish the main argument from the examples. The Murree trip is repeated almost verbatim, and the shift from describing a friend’s experience to your own is abrupt. Connections between sentences are often unclear, while several ideas are joined with full stops or commas in ways that interrupt the flow. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and avoid repeating the same example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “historical places,” “different culture,” “communication skill,” and “climate.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is basic and several words or phrases are repeated, such as “learn a lot,” “visit,” and “different.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, including “knowlege,” “experiense,” “wheater,” and “resour,” which reduce accuracy and sometimes make the reader pause. Some combinations are unnatural, for example “practical infomation” and “best resour for collecting information.” Build a wider set of accurate expressions for describing learning, independence, and preparation for university, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas using clauses, as in “which increase his communication skill,” and includes both statements and examples. However, sentence structures are mostly simple or incomplete, and errors occur throughout. For example, “I am agree” has an incorrect verb form, while “One of my friend going on a tour” lacks a correctly formed verb and plural agreement. Tense shifts also make the account difficult to follow: “I am visit” and “I can visitet” do not express the intended past experience accurately. Articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise forming complete sentences with accurate past-tense verbs, and use a few controlled complex structures to explain cause and effect.

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