Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart demonstrates the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Overall, women in 2009 had the largest proportion in lesiure and sports in each age group while the lowest proportion accounted in working and work related activities and house hold acticities in most of the age group. In conteast, by education bachelor's degree and higher had the most work related activities while the lesuire and sports accounted the largest proportion in less than a high school diploma.

Firstly, work related activities had the largest proportion in age 45-54, 25-34 and 35-44 accounted for 27.3%, 27.0% and 26.3%, In contrast, the lowest proportion for work recorded in 75 and over and 65-74 for 1.3% and 6.9% also it was consistent in 15-19 age group as well. In contrast, lesiure and sports had the largest proportion in age group. 75 and over and 65-74 accounted for 51.7% and 44% and there was no as low proportion in this category. Moreover, household acticities was more active in age group 75 and over, 65-74 recorded at 19.5% and 21.1% getting lower by age group in this category in 2009.

Lastly, education wise most active in work related was bachelor's and higher for 27.4% while the lesuire and sports had the largest proportion in less than a high school diploma for 43.1%. At the end, 20% in the same education level for household activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s broad patterns and include both age and education groups. The overview correctly notes that leisure is highest for women with less than a high-school diploma and that work-related time is highest among degree holders; you also report several relevant figures, such as 51.7 hours of leisure for women aged 75 and over. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: work is highest at 27.0 hours for both the 25–34 and 45–54 groups, not 27.3 for the latter, and household activity peaks at 21.1 hours among 65–74-year-olds, rather than among those aged 75 and over. The overview also misstates the lowest activity pattern: leisure is not the largest category for every age group. Develop the education comparisons beyond the two highest figures to cover the main trends more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, an age-group paragraph and an education paragraph. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several figures and comparisons are compressed into long or incomplete sentences. For example, “the lowest proportion for work recorded in 75 and over and 65-74” does not clearly connect the groups to their values, and “there was no as low proportion in this category” is hard to interpret. Linking phrases such as “In contrast,” are repeated without always marking a clear contrast. Group related figures into clearer comparisons and use precise references to the age or education categories to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “average number of hours,” “work related activities,” “leisure and sports,” and “household activities,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also an attempt to vary wording with phrases such as “accounted for” and “education wise.” However, inaccurate spelling and awkward collocations are noticeable, including “lesiure,” “acticities,” “most active in work related,” and “largest proportion in age group.” “Proportion” is also not the best term for values measured in hours; “time spent” or “hours devoted to” would be more precise. Aim for accurate spelling and natural chart-reporting phrases, and avoid describing hours as a proportion unless the data are expressed as percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “while” and clauses introduced by “although” or “in contrast.” Some sentences communicate the intended comparison, but grammatical control is uneven. For example, “women varying levels of education” is missing a possessive construction, and “the lowest proportion accounted in working” lacks a clear grammatical subject and verb pattern. The sentence beginning “Firstly, work related activities had the largest proportion…” also joins separate ideas with a comma, while “household activities was” has a subject–verb agreement error. Use complete clauses, check singular and plural agreement, and punctuate sentences that contain several comparisons. More consistently accurate sentence structures would make the data easier to understand.

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