Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart depicts the average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities by age and educational attainment during year 2009 houses per week.For age group between 15-19, most of the time is usually spent on leisure and sports whereas least in household activities.The working and work related activities remain as second least time spent by women.On the other hand , for age group 20 to 24 and 25-34, the maximum time is spent on leisure and sports with

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify a relevant feature for the 15–19 group: leisure and sports take the most time, while household activities take the least. However, the response stops partway through a comparison of the 20–24 and 25–34 groups, so it does not provide a complete summary, a clear overview of the chart, or meaningful coverage of the education categories. The chart’s broader patterns—such as leisure rising among older age groups and work hours generally increasing with education—are not reported. The response is also well below the required 150 words, which leaves the task substantially incomplete. To improve, write a full overview and select several accurate comparisons from both the age and education sections.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response begins with an introduction and then attempts to describe age-group data, so there is a basic sense of topic and sequence. The contrast marker “On the other hand” also signals a relationship between points. However, the writing ends abruptly at “with,” leaving the final comparison unfinished and preventing a clear progression through the chart. There are no developed paragraphs or concluding overview, and the repeated focus on individual groups does not establish a coherent structure. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview of the main patterns, and one or two paragraphs comparing selected age and education figures. Complete each sentence and use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “average hours,” “leisure and sports,” “household activities,” and “working and work related activities,” which makes the subject identifiable. The range is nevertheless limited, and some phrasing is awkward or imprecise: “most of the time is usually spent” is wordy, while “second least time spent” is not a natural way to rank the categories. “Houses per week” appears to be an incorrect word choice for “hours per week,” and “during year 2009” is also unnatural. Aim for concise, accurate reporting language such as “spent the most time on” and “recorded the fewest hours.” A wider set of comparison verbs and trend terms would help you describe the chart more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some complete sentence structures, such as “The bar chart depicts…” and “The working and work related activities remain as second least time spent by women.” It also attempts a longer sentence to compare age groups, but this is left incomplete after “with,” so the structure cannot convey a finished idea. There are errors in articles and prepositions, for example “during year 2009” and “least in household activities,” and the opening sentence runs into the next sentence without a space after the full stop. The range is narrow, with little evidence of controlled complex structures. Practise writing complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check articles, prepositions, and punctuation before finishing.

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