Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In this bar chart it illistrate the different age women in different works which is working and work relate activities.The second is leisure and sports. The last one is homechores activities.

In the young age the education and households activities is very less but the leisure and sports activties is in high, About 36.8 in a week.In old age the senario i unlike that is the 44.0 hours liesure acitivty,The other two 1.3 is working as well as 21.1 hours is hosehold activties

On the other hand 35 to 44 age people is same with each activity.the working and leiure activity is 26.3 and 27.4

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the three activity categories and include a few relevant figures, such as 36.8 hours of leisure for the youngest group and 1.3 hours of work for the oldest group. However, the response gives only a very limited account of the chart and does not provide a clear overview of its main patterns. The statement that the youngest women have very little household activity is broadly supported, but the comparison with older women is unclear, and the 65–74 group is confused with the 75-and-over group: 44.0 hours of leisure and 21.1 hours of household activity belong to ages 65–74. The claim that women aged 35–44 spend the same time on each activity is inaccurate; only work and leisure are close. The response is also 45 words below the required minimum, leaving important comparisons undeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response by introducing the chart, describing younger and older women, and then mentioning the 35–44 age group. Phrases such as “On the other hand” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the age groups and comparisons are not clearly identified, and the short paragraphs do not build a complete summary. For example, “In the young age” and “In old age” do not specify which chart categories are being compared, while “the other two” has an unclear reference. Use a clear overview followed by separate, logically ordered comparisons, and make each reference explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “working,” “leisure and sports,” “hours,” and “activities,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is narrow and several word-choice, form, and spelling problems make the description less clear, including “homechores,” “liesure,” “acitivty,” and “senario.” Phrases such as “the different age women in different works” and “the education and households activities” are not natural or precise ways to describe the chart. Aim for accurate terms such as “age groups,” “time spent on,” and “household activities,” and vary reporting language with expressions like “recorded,” “accounted for,” and “rose.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, and some figures can be understood despite the errors. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed. For example, “In this bar chart it illistrate” lacks a correctly formed subject–verb construction, and “the working and leiure activity is 26.3 and 27.4” has problems with agreement and sentence structure. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “the different age women” and the run-on sequence beginning “In old age.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check singular and plural agreement, and separate each comparison with appropriate punctuation. More accurate control of these basic patterns would make the data easier to follow.

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