Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrate the average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment in 2009.

Three types of activities is represneted in the bar charts which are Leisure and sports, Household and work related activities and four level of education.

where leisure and sport actvities are highest in the age of 75 and over and woman between the age of 15 to 19 spent less time of household activities while woman between the age of 45 to 54 worked for 27.3 which is comperatively highest among all other group of ages.

Among the degree holders with above 25 year of age having less than high school dimploma spent 43.1 hours on leisure and sport activities which is highest among all other degree holders while most working hours of 32.4 are spent by woman having some college or associate degree. bachelor holder woman hours remain stable where work for 27.4 hours and spent 28.6 hour on sports activity and 15.2 hours on household activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and mention relevant comparisons, including the high leisure figure for women aged 75 and over and the 27.4 hours of work among women with a bachelor’s degree or higher. However, the response only partially reports the main features: it gives no clear overview of the overall age patterns, and much of the age-group data is omitted. There is also a significant misreading in the education section: 43.1 hours of leisure belongs to women with less than a high-school diploma, not to degree holders, and 32.4 is their leisure figure for women with some college, not their working hours. The claim that 27.3 is the highest working figure by age is inaccurate; the chart shows 27.0 as the peak. Select the main trends and check each comparison against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction is followed by comments on age and education, so the reader can recognise the intended topics. However, the progression is not consistently clear. The second paragraph combines a description of the chart’s categories with several unrelated findings, while the final paragraph shifts between education groups without a clear comparison framework. The opening sentence of that paragraph is especially difficult to follow because it joins the age qualification and diploma category ambiguously. Use a concise overview after the introduction, then organise the details into clearly separated age and education comparisons. Linking phrases such as “By contrast” or “As education level rises” would help show relationships rather than simply listing observations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average hours per week,” “activities,” “degree holders,” and “highest,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the report harder to read, for example “represneted,” “actvities,” “dimploma,” and “comperatively.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “worked for 27.3” is less suitable than describing time spent on work-related activities, and “hours remain stable” does not clearly express the comparison intended. Aim for accurate collocations and consistent labels such as “leisure and sports” and “household activities.” Proofreading spelling and using precise terms for each category would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, but the longer constructions are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships unclear. For example, “Three types of activities is represented” has subject–verb disagreement and an awkward passive construction; “where leisure and sport activities are highest” is an incomplete sentence; and “Among the degree holders with above 25 year of age having less than high school diploma spent…” lacks a clear grammatical subject. Articles, plurals, and verb forms also need attention, as in “woman … spent” and “bachelor holder woman hours remain stable.” Build shorter, complete sentences first, checking that each has a clear subject and verb, then add comparisons using controlled clauses such as “while” or “whereas.”

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