Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.5)

in this bar char, we will discuss about women's activity at different age. We have 60 hours per week. First of all, teenage girls spends 36.8 hours in houshold activities, 6 to 9 hours spends in working and word related activites, in the same way she spends six hours at sports. Similarly, which girls are around 20 to 24 years old, she spends much time in houshold activities then she do work, and lastly, she spends time at sports or other activities. Moreover, who are educated like high school graduate but not in college. he spends more time at sports and than household activities and the same spends time at work. However, which women are more educated such as bachelor's degree and higher, she spends much time at work and sports but she do not spend much time in houshold activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and makes a few relevant comparisons, including that women with a bachelor’s degree spend more time working than on household activities. However, several key figures are misreported: teenage girls spend 36.8 hours on leisure, not household activities, and only 6.0 hours on household activities; the response also reverses the order of activities for this group. The 20–24 age group is described without accurate figures, and the chart’s broad patterns across age and education are not summarised. There is no clear overview of the main trends, and the discussion covers only a small selection of categories. The response is also below the required 150 words. To improve, give an accurate overview and support it with correctly selected comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from teenage girls to women aged 20–24 and then to two education groups. Linking expressions such as “First of all,” “Similarly,” “Moreover,” and “However” show an attempt to connect points. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the progression between age groups and educational attainment is abrupt. Repeated sentence patterns beginning with “she spends” make the account feel list-like, while references such as “which girls” and “he” are unclear or inconsistent. Group the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, and use clearer references to the groups being compared.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “working,” “sports,” “household activities,” “high school graduate,” and “bachelor’s degree.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the chart’s categories. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings reduce clarity: “bar char,” “houshold,” and “activites” are inaccurate, while “sports or other activities” does not precisely represent the chart’s leisure category. Phrases such as “spends much time” and “do work” are also imprecise or unnatural. Use the chart’s category labels consistently and practise comparison language such as “spend more time on,” “the highest figure,” and “in contrast.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts connected sentences and uses some subordinate structures, for example “who are educated like high school graduate but not in college.” However, sentence patterns are limited, and errors in agreement and verb forms occur frequently. Examples include “teenage girls spends,” “she do work,” and “he spends,” where the subject and verb or pronoun do not agree with the group being described. The opening “we will discuss about” is also an awkward construction, and several clauses are joined in ways that make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate present-tense reporting, plural subjects, and concise sentence structures; for example, “Teenage girls spend 36.8 hours per week on leisure.”

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