Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustraes basic engagements like,working and work realted activiies,leisure and sports and housing activities among diffrent age groups of females in 2009.

overall, leisure was the most common among felaes of age group 75 & over, working and work realted costituted major part of women of age group 15-19, whreas household palyed significantrole of age group

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the chart’s subject and mention two relevant patterns: leisure is highest among women aged 75 and over, and household activities are important for one age group. However, the response is only a brief opening and overview, with no supporting comparisons or figures. The claim that working activities “constituted major part” for women aged 15–19 is inaccurate: this group spent 6.9 hours working, compared with 36.8 hours on leisure. The final point about household activities is unfinished and does not name an age group. The response also contains 58 words, well below the required 150, so the task is addressed only minimally. Include a clear overview and accurate comparisons across both age and education categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview beginning with “overall.” This gives the reader a simple starting structure. However, the response ends abruptly, and the final clause, “household palyed significantrole of age group,” is incomplete, so the ideas do not form a finished progression. The overview also places several claims in one sentence without clear separation, and the relationship between them is difficult to follow. To improve, use distinct paragraphs for the introduction, overview and key comparisons, and complete each sentence before moving to the next point. Simple linking phrases such as “By contrast” can help make comparisons clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “leisure and sports,” “working and work related activities,” and “age group.” These terms show awareness of the subject, but spelling errors and imprecise phrasing frequently weaken clarity: “illustraes,” “realted,” “activiies,” “diffrent,” and “felaes” are difficult to read. “Housing activities” is also not the chart’s category; “household activities” is the accurate term. Phrases such as “basic engagements” and “constituted major part” are unnatural or unclear in this context. Aim for precise, standard descriptions such as “time spent on,” “accounted for,” and “the highest figure,” and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a complex overview sentence using contrast, including “whereas,” and the opening sentence communicates the general topic. However, grammatical control is limited in the longer sentence: “working and work realted costituted major part of women of age group 15-19” lacks an article and has an unclear sentence pattern, while the final clause is incomplete. Punctuation is also problematic, with a comma immediately after “like” and no clear sentence boundary before “overall.” Most of the response relies on simple structures, so there is little evidence of a controlled range. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Women aged 75 and over spent the most time on leisure.” Then check articles, clause structure and punctuation.

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