Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates women spending average hours per week in primary activities like working, leisure, sport and

Household work depending on their age and education in the year 2009.

The women under 15-19 year spent around 37 hour per day in leisure and sport. In addition, the age group under 20 to 34 also spend maximum amount of time in leisure and sports and working and work related activities are also equally done.

The age group 35-44 year spend around 28 hour per day in leisure and 27 hour per day in work. The leisure and sports time starts on increasing from 45 years of age which was 32 hour per day to 51 hour per day for women of 75 and above.

The leisure and sports time per hour significantly decreased for women with increase in the education. The women with less than a diploma has the highest leisure time with least work related activities. As the educational qualification increases the opposite trend is seen where women with bachelors degree or higher have more work related activities and least leisure time.

Overall, leisure time decreased with increase in age until 45 years and then start to increase again with increase in age. Furthermore, the leisure time decreases with increase in educational qualification and work related activities increses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have identified the main trends in the data, such as the relationship between age, education, and time spent on activities. However, there is a significant factual error in your interpretation of the data: you state that women spend '37 hour per day' on leisure. Since there are only 24 hours in a day, this indicates a misunderstanding of the chart's units (likely hours per week). This error impacts the accuracy of your reporting. While you cover the main features, the analysis is slightly hampered by these inaccuracies in data interpretation. To improve, ensure you carefully check the units provided in the chart labels before drafting your summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs focusing on age and education respectively, and a concluding overview. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Furthermore', and 'Overall' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the transition between the age-based data and the education-based data could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal flow within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect the specific data points more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'educational attainment', 'qualification', and 'significantly decreased'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'work related activities are also equally done' and 'starts on increasing'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary choices are contextually accurate, especially when describing trends and data relationships.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women... spend' vs 'women... spent') and pluralisation (e.g., '35-44 year' instead of '35-44 years'). Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'increses'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical consistency, particularly regarding verb tenses and noun-number agreement, which will help you achieve a more polished and professional tone.

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