Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the average number of hours that females in various age groups and females with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Overall, working and work related activities recorded its lowest percentage in primary activities age 75 above, while Leisure and sports activities had largest percentage age 75 above the year in 2009.
Working and work related activities stood to around 6.9 percentage women spent money per hour, its increased gradually 45 to 54 aged groups. Aged 55 to 74 this activity fell to around 6.9 percentage. Educational attainment its further rose to roughly 27.4%.
By contrast, Leisure and sports accounted to around 36.8% recorded its peak. This activity swiftly declined aged 35 to 44. From aged 45 to 74 this increased dramatically to approximately 57.7%, while its further fell in educational attainment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have attempted to identify some main features, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a clear, logical overview of the data. You have misinterpreted the data in several places, such as referring to 'percentage' when the chart measures 'hours', and the description of the trends is confusing. To improve, ensure you accurately report the units of measurement and provide a more comprehensive summary that covers all categories (age and education) clearly. The current response is too brief to fully develop the key features of the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition 'Educational attainment its further rose'. The referencing is occasionally confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups and educational levels. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'similarly', 'whereas') to connect sentences and ideas more naturally. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as using 'percentage' instead of 'hours' and 'spent money per hour', which is not supported by the chart. The phrase 'recorded its lowest percentage' is used incorrectly. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'figures', 'data', 'average', and 'duration'. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and adverbs (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'significantly') will help you describe the trends more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'its increased gradually' (should be 'it increased') and 'Aged 55 to 74 this activity fell' (missing preposition). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and awkward phrasing throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and pronoun usage. Increasing the variety of sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will help you reach a higher band.
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