Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustrates the average hours per week women spent on different different activities, based on their age and education attainment in 2009

Overall, it is clear that leisure and sports had the highest figure, while household activities had the lowest, the leisure and sports 75 and over compare to household activities 15 to 19.

Looking at the details working and work related activities 75 to over highest in contrast household activities 15 to 19 lowest.

Meanwhile working and work related activities 75 and over household activities 15 to 19. By

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 92 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have attempted to identify some features of the chart, the analysis is fragmented and lacks the necessary depth to provide a clear summary. Many comparisons are incomplete or confusing, such as the mention of '75 and over' without clear context. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive overview, select key data points to support your claims, and write a full report that meets the length requirement to allow for sufficient development of ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. The text is composed of disjointed sentences rather than cohesive paragraphs. There is a lack of linking words or cohesive devices to connect ideas, making the information difficult to follow. For example, the transition between the overview and the details is abrupt, and the final sentence is incomplete ('By...'). To improve, you should group related information into clear paragraphs and use transition signals (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' 'Regarding') to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to describe the data accurately. You use basic terms like 'highest' and 'lowest' repeatedly. There are also errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'different different activities' and 'education attainment' (should be 'educational attainment'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. Focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' 'accounted for,' and 'proportion.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Many sentences are incomplete or lack a main verb, such as 'the leisure and sports 75 and over compare to household activities 15 to 19.' There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. The final sentence is a fragment, which significantly affects the clarity of the writing. To improve, focus on constructing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and practice using a variety of sentence structures, including subordinate clauses.

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