Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE GIVEN TABLE LILLUSTRATE AVERAGE HOURS PER WOMEN SPENT IN SELECTED ACTIVITIES BY AGE AND EDUCATIONAL ATTANIMENT IN 2009. THW DATA CALBRATED IN NUMBER .

OVERALL,IN 75 AND OVER 75 AGE HIGHEST LEISURE AND SPORT ACTIVITES .EDUCATIONAL ATTAINMENT HAS SAME HIGHEST ACTIVITES.

TO BEGINE WITH, THE WOMEN HIGHEST SPENT PRE HOURS IN 15 TO 19 AGE LEISURE AND SPORTS ACTIVITES . IN 75 AND OVER 75 WORKING AND WORK RELATED ACTIVITES HAS VERY LOW ABOUT 1.3 . 35 TO 44 IN BETWEEN MOST FOVTABLE ACTIVITES IS LEISURE AND SPORTS , HOUSEHOLD ACTIVITES .IN EDUCATIONAL ATTAINMENT HIGH SCHOOL DIPLOMA HAS VERY LEISURE AND SPOTRS AVTIVITES ABOUT 43.1 AND ALL AGE ARE ABOUE THE 25 YEARS ALL WOMEN LESS TO CHOICE WORKING AND WORK RELATED ACTIVITES . HIGH SCHOOL GRADUATES ,NO COOLEGE LEISURE AND SPORTS IS HIGH 38.9 HOURS AND OTHER ACTIVITES IS WORKING AND WORK REALTED ACTIVITES IS 16.7 HOURS SPENT IN HIGH SCHOOL GRADUATES , NO COLLEGE .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The information presented is often confusing, and the figures cited do not clearly correspond to the trends shown in the chart. There is a lack of logical selection of main features; instead, the response lists isolated data points without meaningful comparison. The overview is underdeveloped and does not capture the significant trends in the data. To improve, focus on identifying the highest and lowest values across categories and grouping them logically rather than listing individual numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'in' and 'and'. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the lack of clear referencing makes it difficult to follow which data points are being compared. The overall structure is disjointed, which hinders the reader's ability to understand the information presented.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'LILLUSTRATE', 'ATTANIMENT', 'CALBRATED', 'FOVTABLE', and 'COOLEGE'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data accurately, relying on basic terms like 'highest' and 'activities'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect sentence structure. For example, 'THE GIVEN TABLE LILLUSTRATE' should be 'The given table illustrates', and 'THE WOMEN HIGHEST SPENT PRE HOURS' is syntactically incorrect. The use of punctuation is also inconsistent, with excessive use of capital letters. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences.

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