Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar graph shows, average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activity each week. The age gap is given in every five years till 25, afterword it is measured in decades.

Overall, it can be seen that on the y axis, there are two things which is told, the first tells the age difference and other one tells about education attainment(25 and over). On the x axis the chart of hours per week spend by women in 2009.

On the one hand, bar demonstrates working activities mostly done by age group by(45-54), leisure and sports are played actively in between (15-19) with a huge margin of 36.8 hours , Household activities are done by the most eldest group of (75- over) a little more than 50% of women participated in it.

On the other hand, most hours working in house

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. While it attempts to introduce the graph, the description of the data is incomplete and fragmented. The summary of the main features is missing, and the analysis of the data is superficial and inaccurate. For instance, the claim that 'household activities are done by the most eldest group' is not clearly supported by the provided data, and the response ends abruptly mid-sentence, leaving the task unfinished. The lack of a clear overview and the failure to report key comparisons mean the response does not meet the requirements for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as the transition 'On the one hand' which is not followed by a balanced 'On the other hand' structure in a meaningful way. The referencing is unclear, and the abrupt ending significantly disrupts the flow of the text, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended points.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The range of vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'age gap is given in every five years' and 'most eldest group'. The vocabulary used is repetitive and lacks the precision required for describing statistical data. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing trends or comparisons, which limits the ability to convey information clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('on the y axis'), subject-verb agreement ('there are two things which is told'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are poorly constructed, and the abrupt termination of the final sentence indicates a lack of control over complex structures. The range of grammar is limited to simple, often flawed, sentence patterns.

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