Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar chart represents the average number of hours that women in various age group and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week . The data has been calibrated in percentage
Overall it is crystal clear that highest value recorded by leisure and sports whose aged over the 75 .While the lowest value recorded in households works by women aged between 15 to 19 .
Fleeting a glance in aged between the 15 to 19 spent highest time in leisure and sports approximately 36.6 % and in household work are 5 % in working 6.8 percent . while 22 % 32.7% and 10% by primary activities between the aged between 20 to 24 . where as in aged between 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 be remain similar in given time . those women aged between 55 to 64 are ranging from 20.8 % to 10 % remaining older aged women had least time spent on working and other activities .
Moving ahead those women did not passed the high school are ranging 10 to 43 percent those who complete the high school but do not went for colleges are 16.7 % 38 % 15 .6% whereas some goes to colleges and complete their studies did not surpass by 33% .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The introduction incorrectly states the data is in percentages, whereas the chart displays hours. The selection of data is disjointed and lacks a logical focus, often listing figures without meaningful comparison or synthesis. Key features, such as the clear trends across age groups or educational levels, are not effectively highlighted. The information provided is often confusing, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main trends in the chart. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant differences and similarities rather than listing isolated data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or inappropriate, such as 'Fleeting a glance' and 'Moving ahead'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points correspond to which categories. The lack of logical flow between sentences hinders the overall readability. To improve, use a wider range of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There is a significant error in the introduction where 'percentage' is used instead of 'hours'. Phrases like 'be remain similar' and 'did not passed' demonstrate a lack of control over basic word forms and collocations. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data comparisons with precision. To improve, focus on learning specific terminology for describing charts, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and ensure that you use the correct units of measurement as provided in the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('those women did not passed'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions, such as 'whose aged over the 75'. The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that verb tenses are used consistently throughout the report.
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