Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graphs illustrates about average hours spent by women in selected primary activities with some factors age and educational attainment during the time period of 2009 . It also depicts about the importance of education . The data is represents in numbers and percentage .
Overall , it`s crystal clear that their instant rise was shown until the age of over 75 but then the graph showed diminished in whole data . The second graph showed their was greater number of women learn her less than high school diploma .
In detail , their was shown that in age group of 15 to 19 most of the women are in leisure and sports . Secondly ,20 to 24 age of women highly joined working and work related activities . Their was slightly similar number of women in working and sports of age 35 to 44 . Moreover , their was total;y interest of women was finish in working when there age cross 75 because of health issues rises in this age .
However , in furthermore in education area their was leisure and sports women are taking highest education in less than a high school diploma . Working and leisure women was considerably same in bachelor`s degree or higher . household activities shows fluctuation in whole graph .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The main features are not effectively highlighted, and the descriptions of the trends are often confusing or factually incorrect based on the provided chart (e.g., the claim about women with less than a high school diploma). The overview is vague and lacks a clear grasp of the data trends. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant differences and trends, such as comparing the highest and lowest activity hours across age groups, rather than listing details in a disjointed manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as the repetitive and misused 'their was' at the start of many sentences. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups and educational levels. The transition between ideas is abrupt, and the overall structure lacks the necessary flow to guide the reader through the data analysis effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which hinders the clarity of the report. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'diminished in whole data' and 'totally interest of women was finish'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends and comparisons precisely. You rely on basic phrasing and struggle with collocations related to data description. To reach a higher band, you should learn specific vocabulary for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak', and 'remain stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a persistent misuse of 'their' instead of 'there', and subject-verb agreement is frequently incorrect (e.g., 'the data is represents'). Sentence structures are often fragmented or poorly constructed, making the text difficult to parse. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are almost always faulty. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically the correct use of 'there is/are' and ensuring that verbs are correctly conjugated to match the subject.
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