Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart delineates changes in educational attainment across the world from 2009 average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities.

Overall, it is clear that working and work related activities witnessed a progressive upward trend whereas leisure and sports registered a downward trajectory. It is also noticeable that household activities experience the most pronounced fluctuations throughout the time frame.

In 2009, the figure for working and work related activities stood at exactly 6.9. this was followed by a sharp escalation over the subsequent in the age 15 to 19, culminating in a peak of 27.4in bachelor's degree and higher. meanwhile household activities experienced a parallel increase climbing steadily to reach 21.1.

Conversely, leisure and sports 51.2 commenced the period at a high of number, after which it plummeted dramatically to a nadir of 27.4 in 35 to 44 age. before stabilizing fractionally for the remainder of the time frame.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to accurately interpret the chart. The prompt asks for a comparison of age groups and educational attainment, but the response confuses these categories, referring to 'time frames' and 'trends' that do not exist in a static bar chart. The data points cited (e.g., '6.9', '27.4') are presented without clear context, and the analysis is largely incoherent because it treats the chart as a line graph showing change over time. Consequently, the main features are not clearly identified or reported, and the response fails to address the core requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is severely hampered by the misinterpretation of the data. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'Overall', 'Conversely', 'meanwhile'), they are often applied to illogical statements. The referencing is unclear, and the lack of a coherent relationship between the sentences makes the text difficult to follow. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related ideas, as the content within the paragraphs is disjointed and factually confusing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and often misused in this context. While there is an attempt to use academic-style language such as 'delineates', 'pronounced fluctuations', and 'nadir', these terms are applied to data that does not support such descriptions. There are also significant errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'stabilizing fractionally' and 'escalation over the subsequent in the age'. The range is sufficient to attempt the task, but the lack of precision and the misuse of terminology significantly impact the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that impede communication. Examples include 'this was followed by a sharp escalation over the subsequent in the age 15 to 19' and 'leisure and sports 51.2 commenced the period at a high of number'. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and misplaced periods. These errors are frequent and often make the intended meaning difficult to decipher.

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