Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart given demonstrates the average time spend by females of different age categories and educational levels on fundamental activities per week.

Overall, in 2009, the time spent by age 15 to 75 women on leisure activities is higher than the other activities. Women of age 125 and over spent most of their time on educational attainment.

In terms of working and work related activities women of age 15 to 75 spent number of hours between 6 to 13. In contrast, time spent about 27 to 44 hours by females of age 15 to 75 and over which is the highest average. In comparison, average hours spent by women of age 15 to 75 are around 6 to 21, lower than sport activities but higher than work related tasks.

For women of age 125 and over the average time spent on all activities is less than a high school diploma. In terms of high school graduates and no college women the time spent of different tasks is higher. If we talk about females of bachelor's degree, the average of number of hours is comparitevly higher

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately interpret the data provided in the chart. There are significant factual errors, such as referencing 'age 125 and over,' which does not exist on the chart, and misinterpreting the categories of educational attainment as age groups. The summary of the main features is confused, and the data points cited are often inaccurate or unclear. While the response attempts to address the prompt, the lack of precision and the inclusion of non-existent data points mean the task is not adequately fulfilled. To improve, focus on carefully reading the labels on the axes and ensuring that the data reported matches the visual information provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is illogical and confusing. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the repetitive use of 'In terms of' and 'In comparison.' The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data points are being compared. The lack of logical flow between sentences and the misinterpretation of the chart categories significantly hinder the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic phrases like 'time spent' and 'number of hours.' There are errors in word choice, such as 'educational attainment' being used as a category of people rather than a level of schooling. The spelling error 'comparitevly' also detracts from the quality of the writing. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained constant,' or 'exceeded.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'average time spend' (should be 'spent'), 'women of age 125 and over' (incorrect prepositional phrase), and 'time spent of different tasks' (incorrect preposition). These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. A greater focus on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage is necessary to improve the accuracy of your writing.

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