Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph shows the average working hours of women in diffrent various age groups and spending of money on education activities.
Overall,it is evident that women in all groups spent significant time in household and sports activities,while diploma women's spend highest number of time in work related activities
Turning to details,women between 15 to 19 spend highest time in leisure and sports and spend same amount of time in other activities.women in 20 to 24 spend 32.8 % time in leisure and sports .in rise of age women figure experienced surge decrease in leisure and sports activities
Probing further, in age category of 35 to 44 , figure of household activities surge to 32.2 while women between 55 and 64 36.2 in the leisure and sports activities.next diploma women spend highest proportion of time in the leisure and sports activities.Thereafter women over 75 spend lowest hours in week on household activities
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with accuracy and clarity. The introduction incorrectly identifies the data as 'spending of money', whereas the chart clearly depicts 'average hours'. While you identify some trends, the reporting of figures is often confusing or inaccurate (e.g., mentioning '32.8 %' when the chart shows hours). The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the main features. To improve, ensure you carefully read the axis labels and units of measurement, and focus on selecting the most significant trends rather than listing individual data points, which can lead to a disjointed summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by poor sentence structure and a lack of effective cohesive devices. Transitions between ideas are often abrupt or missing, such as the sudden shift in the final paragraph. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups and educational levels. To reach a higher band, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'diffrent various' (redundant) and 'surge decrease', which is a contradiction. The phrase 'diploma women's spend highest number of time' is unnatural and imprecise. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. You should focus on learning collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant proportion', 'a steady decline', or 'the highest figure was recorded by'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women figure experienced'), missing articles (e.g., 'in rise of age'), and incorrect preposition usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using articles correctly before nouns.
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