Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the given bar chart elucidates the information about everage number ofhours that women's of different ages varying the education spend on primary activities each week of 2009 first at all the teenagers girl like 15 to 19 years old who do 6.9 hours on working and working related activities and 36.8 hours of a week spend on leisure sport activities and short period 6.0 percent of time spend on household activities like home cleaning etc .then girls off age 20 to 24 spend there time most of time on sports activities 32.7 hours and 22.0 hours on working and 10.0 hours spend on house hold activities .and then the mature girls ages around 25 to 34 they spend there most of time on working and sports activites 27.0 hours on working and 28.6 hours on sports and 13.2 hours on household activities and the girls of age 35 to 44 they spend there 26.3 on there working and 27.0 hours on sports activites and 16.7 on household and then the bar chart shows the girls of age 45 to 54 spend there 20.9 hours on working and 36.2 hours on sports activites and 17.3 on there household .and the woman's off old age 55 to 64 spend 20.9 hours on working and 44.0 hours on sports activites and 5.6 hours on house hold nd then he oldest woman's 65 to 74 they spend there 6.9 hours on working and 44.0 hours on leisure sports activites and 21.3 hours on house hold and they woman's of ages over 75 they spent there less time on working around 1.3 hours and 51.7 hours on sports activities to get healthy life and 19.5 hours spend on household and the girls how have no school diploma the girl spend there 10.7 hours on working and 43.1 hours on sports activities and 20.0 hours on a week spend on household and the girls who have only high school graduation not have any college degree these girls spend there 16.7 hours on working and 38.9 hours on sport activities and 18.6 hours on household and some girls who have college degrees they spend there 23.3 hours on working and 32.3 hours on sports and 16.7 hours spend on household and the girls who have bachelors degree these girls spend there 27.4 hours on week in working and 28.6 hours on sport activities and 15 . 2 hours on house hold

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting data for both age groups and educational attainment. However, the presentation is purely a list of figures without any synthesis or identification of key trends. The response lacks an overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The data is presented in a mechanical, repetitive way, listing every single figure rather than grouping information to highlight significant comparisons or contrasts. To improve, you should group the data into logical categories and provide a clear summary of the main features, such as identifying which age group spends the most time on leisure or how education levels correlate with working hours.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing entirely, appearing as one long block of text. This makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of logical progression; the information is presented as a stream of data points connected by repetitive use of 'and' or 'then'. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, and the lack of sentence variety makes the text feel monotonous. To improve, you must organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Use a wider range of linking words such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'whereas', and 'consequently' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'spend there time' and 'spend on', throughout the response. There are also errors in word choice, such as referring to adults as 'teenagers girl' or 'mature girls'. The phrasing is often unnatural, and there is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or data points. To improve, try to vary your verbs (e.g., 'allocate', 'devote', 'dedicate') and use more precise terminology for the data (e.g., 'the highest proportion', 'a significant increase', 'remained stable').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is weak, with frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and subject-verb agreement. Many sentences are run-on, lacking proper punctuation, and there is a consistent misuse of 'there' instead of 'their'. You also struggle with articles ('the woman's', 'a week') and pluralization. The sentence structures are very simple and repetitive, relying heavily on 'they spend'. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensure you use correct pronouns, and practice using complex sentences with subordinate clauses to improve the flow and accuracy of your writing.

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