Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the time (in hours) women of various age groups spend on primary activities weekly in 2009. Simultaneously, it gives the time expenditure data of women who have various level of education.

Overall, from the bar chart, eight age group data are obtained. Also, there are four data based on the educational levels of women. For leisure and sports purpose, women who are 75 or more than 75 years spend the most time on the bar chart. For household activities, 65 to 74 aged women spent the most of the time. Whereas, for working activities, 45 to 54 aged women spend the most.

First of all, for leisure and sports, women from 15 to 64 have almost similar time expenditure. They spend 26 to 36 hours on average in a week for leisure and sports. However, women from 65 to 75 or over spend significantly higher time, from 44 to 51 hours per week. For working, women of 20 to 64 years spend 22 to 27 hours. But, 15 to19 and 65 to 75 or over spend only 6 to 7 hours weekly for working. Lastly, for household activities, 15 to 19 years old spend only 6 hours. In Contrast, women from 20 to 75 and over years old spend almost similar hour of time weekly, which is 10 to 21 hours.

Based on educational levels, women who do not have a school diploma spend more time in leisure or sports, 43.1 hours weekly. They also spent 20 hours weekly for household works, which is most among all. For work related activities, women who have a Bachelor's degree or more spent more than 27 hours, which is the most among others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the main features of the bar chart. You have successfully identified key trends across age groups and educational levels. However, the overview is somewhat mechanical and lacks a synthesis of the most significant trends. For instance, while you mention specific data points, you could improve by grouping information more effectively to highlight the overall contrast between age-related and education-related trends. The reporting of data is generally accurate, though some comparisons could be more precise to better reflect the 'main features' requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast,' 'However,' and 'Lastly,' which help the flow of information. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, but the progression of ideas within paragraphs could be smoother. For example, the transition between age-based data and education-based data is abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring a more natural flow between sentences would enhance the coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'expenditure,' 'attainment,' and 'primary activities' appropriately. There are some instances of slightly unnatural phrasing, such as 'eight age group data are obtained' and 'most of the time.' While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, there is limited use of less common or more sophisticated lexical items. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise collocations and varied synonyms to avoid repetition of words like 'spend' and 'time.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'various level of education' (should be 'levels'), '65 to 74 aged women' (should be 'women aged 65 to 74'), and 'most among all.' These errors are frequent but do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct placement of adjectives. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

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