Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This bar chart illustrates the average number of hours that women spend in different kind of primary activities including working, leisure and sports and household activities.

Overall, women who have 15 to 75 and over age are involved in various activities. According to this bar chart, 27.4 ladies who hold bachelors degree or higher than that are involved in activities which are related to work. It shows the highest number of this education attainment are involved in it. Similarly age wise 45 to 54 age ladies are attached with work and work related activities. While, the lowest number of girls which are indulged in household activities are from 15 to 19 age group. Likewise, only 15.2% women are interested after bachelors degree in educational attainment sector which is indicating the lowest proportion.

However, 51.7 women 75 or over it are interested in leisure and sports and same in educational attainment less than a high school diploma girls spend in this category more hours per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, but the presentation of data is often unclear or inaccurate. For instance, the reference to '27.4 ladies' is confusing as the unit is hours, not people. The comparison between age groups and education levels is attempted, but the lack of clarity in identifying the specific categories (e.g., 'attached with work') makes it difficult for the reader to follow the data trends. While the overview attempts to summarize, it lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the most significant trends, such as the clear inverse relationship between age and work hours. More precise data selection and clearer labeling of categories are needed to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into three paragraphs, which is appropriate for a report. However, the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'Likewise' and 'However', which do not always effectively link the contrasting ideas. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when referring back to specific data points. The flow between sentences is disjointed, making the overall argument difficult to follow. To improve, you should focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'ladies' (which is informal for a data report), 'attached with work', and 'indulged in'. The phrase 'educational attainment sector' is also used incorrectly in context. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on basic vocabulary hinder the quality of the report. To improve, you should practice using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'category', and 'educational background'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'girls which are indulged'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., '75 or over it'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often clunky, which occasionally impedes readability. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on reducing these frequent errors and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately. Reviewing basic sentence patterns and subject-verb agreement will be highly beneficial.

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