Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This bar graph represents the mean of hours that women in different age groups and women with different levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

In first scenario, the bar graph shows, the hours spent on each activity based on age. The age group 15 to 19, kids, mostly spend their time in leisure and sports, and lesser time in work related activities and extreamly less household activities, as they are students. As they grow up the hours of household and work related activity increases, as they start taking responsibilities in life

In the second scenario, the bar graph representsthe hours spent on each activity based on their education level. Here, students in school tend to be ocupied in sports or other leisure activities and less on work activitis, and as they grow older, their work activites increases. However, the household activities remains almost the same accross all education levels.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to adequately summarise the main features of the data. While it identifies the two categories (age and education), it lacks specific data points or comparative analysis. The description is overly generalised and subjective, referring to age groups as 'kids' rather than using the provided labels. Crucially, it fails to report any actual figures from the chart, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, you must select key data points—such as the highest and lowest values—and make direct comparisons between groups rather than providing a narrative description of life stages.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and somewhat mechanical, such as 'In first scenario' and 'In the second scenario'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between sentences lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Conversely,' 'Furthermore') to connect your observations more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'extreamly', 'representsthe', and 'ocupied'. The range of vocabulary is basic and lacks the precision needed to describe statistical data effectively. For example, instead of 'mean of hours', 'average number of hours' is more appropriate. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuates,' 'remains constant,' or 'a significant proportion,' and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Subject-verb agreement issues are common, such as 'the hours of household and work related activity increases' (should be 'increase') and 'the household activities remains' (should be 'remain'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect spacing. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors impact the overall fluency. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and refining sentence structure will help improve your accuracy.

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