Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This bar chart shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week. The primary activities included here are working and work related activities, leisure and sport and household activities. By the chart, it can be noticed that for every age group the maximum number of hours per week are utilized by the leisure and sports category. Whereas, the differences in the working and household activities could be found. These differences are also on the basis of the education attained. Females with bachelors degree and higher then to spend around 27.4 hours per on working and 15.2 hours per week on household activities. Where in contrast, the age group of 15 to 19 tend to spend most of their time on leisure and sports by giving 36.8 hours per week. Starting from age 20 till 54, the working hours are approximately around 27 hours per week, and reaching till age 75 the working hours decrease and gets up to 1 hour per week.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the dominance of leisure activities and the trends in working hours by age. However, the analysis is somewhat fragmented and lacks a clear overview or summary of the educational attainment data. While you mention that differences exist based on education, you do not clearly contrast the specific figures for different education levels, which is a key part of the prompt. The data selection is generally relevant, but the reporting of figures could be more precise and better organised to highlight the most significant comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is coherent overall, but the progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed. The transition between discussing age groups and educational attainment is abrupt. While you use some cohesive devices like 'whereas' and 'in contrast', the paragraphing is non-existent; a single block of text makes the information harder to digest. Using clear paragraph breaks—one for an overview and one or two for detailed comparisons—would significantly improve the logical flow and readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'educational attainment', 'primary activities', and 'utilized'. However, there are some awkward collocations and minor errors, such as 'higher then to spend' (should be 'higher tend to spend') and 'reaching till age 75'. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated reporting verbs and varied ways to describe trends and comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'By the chart, it can be noticed' (should be 'From the chart, it can be seen'), 'higher then to spend' (should be 'tend to spend'), and 'gets up to 1 hour' (should be 'drops to 1 hour'). While these errors do not prevent the meaning from being understood, they indicate a lack of control over complex structures. Increasing your focus on subject-verb agreement and correct prepositional usage will help.
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