Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustration give the information about the average numbers of hours that women spend in different age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week. Overall, in 2009, 75 and over age women were spend most of the hours in leisure and sports with the highest percentage of 51.7. In contract, at lowest 1.3 propotion hours were spend on working and work related activities.
It is quite avident from the line chart that age group of 15 to 19 working related activities were high with the average of 6.9 hours however it is just 1.3 hours by the age group of 75 which is lowest.
Meanwhile, line graph shows that high school graduates with age group of 25 were spend house hold activities slight the same as bechelors degree and higher education students. Major difference as we can see that in the line chart that 75 age group were spend alot of hours in leisure and sports while just were spend some hours in working related activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately report the data. The student misinterprets the chart, referring to it as a 'line chart' when it is a bar chart, and confuses percentages with hours (e.g., '51.7' is treated as a percentage, but the chart measures hours). The selection of data is disjointed, and the comparisons are unclear or factually incorrect based on the provided image. The overview is weak, as it focuses on specific data points rather than identifying the main trends across age and education levels. To improve, focus on grouping data logically and ensuring the units of measurement are correctly identified.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is confusing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In contract' (likely meant 'In contrast') and 'Meanwhile', but they are often used incorrectly or do not effectively link the sentences. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups and education levels. The structure feels mechanical, and the lack of clear logical flow between the introduction, body paragraphs, and the overall summary hinders the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'propotion hours were spend' and 'avident'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe the data, relying on basic phrases like 'spend a lot of hours'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'bechelors' and 'house hold'. To reach a higher band, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary to include terms related to data analysis, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained constant', or 'a significant disparity'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'women were spend' instead of 'women spent'. Sentence structures are largely simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors, such as 'age group of 15 to 19 working related activities were high'. Punctuation is also inconsistent. A significant improvement in basic grammatical accuracy is required before the student can effectively demonstrate a wider range of complex structures.
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