Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrate the comparison between the average number of hours per week involving primary activities among women of diferent age levels and educational attainment in 2009.

Overall, it is evident that Leisure and sports activities are decreasing with the increasing of age up to young age group then are decling with the older age group while opposite trend is followed in the Workig and work related acivities. In contrast, household activities remain almost stable over the whole period.

In term of working and work related activities, the most trend was shown by the women of 25-54 years age group as compared to the least which was exhibited by 15-19 and 55-74 age group with no work by 75 or over.

In term of leisure and sports activities, the almost opposite trend as working group was followed by this except the extreme age groups.

In term of household activities, trend remained approximately same except

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to complete the task as it ends abruptly mid-sentence. While you have identified the main features and attempted to make comparisons, the lack of a conclusion and the incomplete final paragraph significantly hinder the overall task fulfillment. You have successfully highlighted the trends for working and leisure activities, but the analysis of educational attainment is entirely missing from the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure you cover all categories presented in the prompt and provide a complete, coherent summary. The current response is unfinished, which prevents a higher score as the data is not fully reported or synthesized.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression is interrupted by the incomplete ending. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'In term of', but these are repetitive and sometimes grammatically incorrect (e.g., 'In term of' should be 'In terms of'). The referencing is generally clear, but the lack of a final sentence or concluding thought makes the structure feel disjointed. To improve, vary your linking phrases and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, finished point before moving to the next. The abrupt end to the text is a major issue for coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You use basic terms like 'increasing' and 'decreasing' repeatedly. There are also spelling errors such as 'diferent', 'Workig', and 'acivities'. While you attempt to describe trends, the range of vocabulary is limited. To improve, try to use more sophisticated synonyms for trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'remain constant', or 'peak'. Additionally, ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes, as these detract from the professional tone of an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that affect readability. For example, 'The bar chart illustrate' should be 'illustrates' (subject-verb agreement), and 'are decling' should be 'are declining'. There are also issues with preposition usage and article omission. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage. Practice using a wider variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, while ensuring they are punctuated correctly.

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