Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the bar chart depicts the information in 2009 different age groups of women are spending the number of hours on three primary activities every week the data is calibrated in ages groups

overall, over aged are spending their maximum time on the leisure and sports and same age group spending minimum hours on working and work related activities.

it is crystal clear that, the 55 to 64 aged women are spending more hours rather than some college or associate degree on leisure and sports these are 36.7 and 32.4. moreover, 65 to 74 aged group. of females showing more interest in household activities as compare to high school graduates, no college these are 21.1 and 18.6 weekly. 15 to 19 is 6.0 in household activities and 35 to 44 is 17.3 in household activities also.

to conclude, leisure and sports are showing maximum always and working and work related activities are showing minimum always.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical selection of key features. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the comparisons are often confusing or inaccurate. For instance, the comparison between age groups and educational attainment is muddled, making it difficult to follow the trends. The response lacks a clear focus on the main features, such as the overall dominance of leisure activities across all groups. To improve, you should group data logically (e.g., by activity or by age) and ensure that the figures cited are clearly linked to the correct categories.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'it is crystal clear that' and 'to conclude'. The referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader to guess which data points belong to which category. The lack of effective linking words between sentences makes the text feel like a list of isolated observations rather than a cohesive report. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'spending the number of hours' and 'showing more interest' are basic and do not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'over aged' instead of 'older women' or 'the elderly'. The response relies heavily on repeating the same verbs and nouns throughout the text. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate a wider variety of topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', 'predominant', and 'educational background'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures. There are frequent errors in sentence construction, punctuation, and article usage, such as 'the 55 to 64 aged women' and 'as compare to'. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which hinders readability. The use of complex structures is largely absent or attempted unsuccessfully. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using a variety of complex sentences (e.g., using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions) to connect ideas more effectively.

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