Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart illustrates the average number of hours spent by women in multiple age groups as well as women with different levels of education on primary activities each week.
Overall, the chart is consists of different age groups and distinct educational attainment in time frame 2009. Moreover, the hours per week are distributed in three different activities including: working and work related activities, leisure and sports, house hold activities.
To begin with the age group, 15 to 19 years old individuals were seen more involved in leisure and sports around 36% but least in household activities and work related activities. Furthermore, the overall trend for leisure and sports is shown increased in all group of ages.
In addition, hours in household activities are shown gradually increased by all age groups and educational attainment and at peak in high school diploma sector. However, the work related activities are fluctuating over all ages and recorded at its peak in 35 to 44 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have identified some trends, but the data reporting is inconsistent. For instance, you mention percentages (36%) which are not present in the provided chart, as the data represents 'average hours'. Furthermore, the comparison between age groups and educational attainment is not fully developed. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the units of measurement and provide more specific data points to support your observations. The overview is present but could be more clearly integrated to highlight the most significant trends across both categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. For example, 'To begin with the age group' is a slightly unnatural way to introduce the first body paragraph. While you use transition words like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', the connection between sentences is occasionally weak. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which data point corresponds to which category. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic descriptors like 'increased' and 'fluctuating'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'high school diploma sector', which does not accurately describe the data categories. Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'house hold' (should be one word: 'household'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'peaked at', 'remained stable', or 'showed a downward trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. For example, 'the chart is consists of' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'the chart consists of'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'in time frame 2009' (should be 'in the 2009 time frame'). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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