Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the average number of hours that women in various age groups and women with varying levels of education spend on primary activities each week.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment, 2009

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustrates is Average hours per week women spent in selected primary activities, by age and educational attainment in the given time period ,2009.

Overall, three different types of activities are Working & work related activities, Leisure & sports, Household activities. Total House per week 60 hours.

Working & work related activities it higher 25 to 54 age women average 27 house per week. Compare to Leisure & sports it has higher week hour compare to all from 15 age to 75 & over roughly there average week period 36.8 hours.

Household activities are marked in the dark color compare to all household are very lowest women in there primary activities from age group (15 to 75 & over). In educational attainment more less than a high school diploma.

In conclusion High school graduates , no college are highly Leisure & sports compare to all other 25 age group house per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. While it mentions the categories, the description of the figures is confusing and often inaccurate (e.g., stating 'Total House per week 60 hours' which is not supported by the chart). The comparisons are poorly developed and lack the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response. Key features are not highlighted effectively, and the information provided is fragmented, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main trends in the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the abrupt transition in the third paragraph. The referencing is unclear, and the relationship between the sentences is often difficult to follow. The conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points but rather introduces a specific detail in a confusing manner. Overall, the lack of clear organization significantly hinders the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Total House per week' instead of 'total hours' and 'higher week hour' instead of 'higher weekly average'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology to describe data trends, relying on basic and often incorrect phrasing. The misuse of terms like 'house' instead of 'hours' throughout the text indicates a lack of control over basic vocabulary related to the task, which frequently impedes communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the intended meaning. Sentence structures are simple and often incomplete or poorly constructed, such as 'The bar chart illustrates is Average hours...'. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement and pluralization (e.g., '25 to 54 age women'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the misuse of articles and prepositions is pervasive. While some simple sentences are understandable, the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and limits the range of structures used.

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